Dear Night Daisy Daisy (slight edit)

[Lovely]

Dear heavenly father, forgive my sins
for I sin within,
I say one this and one that to another
yet attune not to my soul for comfort.

Dear heavenly daisy, you drive me crazy
my wishful wonderings,
of the exploding stars so bright
so beautiful so divine begins you an endless

daisy bent in space and time. This lent.
I really love the way you shine you friend,
in the mid of night as my world turns away again
the what coming about again again.

Hands across my heart dear daisy
your peace I haven't seen so lately so crazy,
but I have in this night
daisy seen you shine a light so crazy
in me.....the night chanting of my garden to be.

Twelve petals of wonder and a sun at centre, eh?
But more, this love galore, in depths and ways.

[Gazelle]

Dear Lovely, This poem is very interesting. You share yourself with ease, it just flows. I am sure you get a sense of satisfaction and it must feel good. Gazelle

[Lake]

Lovely,

You write lovely words, here. There's yearning I can feel. Not sure 'eh?' at the end of the penultimate line.

Best,
Lake

[Pauline]

Dear Lovely, You have such a passion for life. You see wonder all around, like a child with eyes open wide

[arunansu]

I second Gazelle. The flow in the poem is superb and you have a super sense of rhyme. I would have said a thing or two about the punctuations, but no... leave it!

Just flowed with the stars!