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Thu Nov 12, 2009 11:15 am

Rubs it's hands and legs
like a monkey in the street,
grabbing by your feet.
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Sat Nov 14, 2009 5:29 pm

grabbing by your feet
pebbles shift effortlessly
under clear water.
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Sun Nov 15, 2009 2:55 am

under clear water
golden fish nibbles around
the moon's reflection
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Tue Nov 17, 2009 3:10 pm

the moon's reflection
ghost-shadows
on waters
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Tue Nov 17, 2009 3:45 pm

On waters within
subtle urges rise slowly;
a gasp of release.
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Wed Nov 18, 2009 4:07 am

a gasp of release -
she landed a triple jump
then failed a double
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Thu Nov 19, 2009 6:40 pm

...then failed a double,
then I attained a single;
now merged into one.
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Sun Nov 22, 2009 10:18 am

now merged into one
like the moth wants the bright flame
I want you, want you.
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Mon Nov 23, 2009 2:55 pm

I want you, want you!
- a bluebird fades
into the blue
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Mon Nov 23, 2009 3:11 pm

into the blue
cotton strings unfurl, weightless-
tempted by the wind.
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Wed Nov 25, 2009 6:53 am

tempted by the wind
a feather leaps, soars high
dove’s morning
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Wed Nov 25, 2009 2:44 pm

dove's morning
cooing voices behind lace
fluffed nesting blankets.
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Wed Nov 25, 2009 3:35 pm

fluffed nestling blanket
she's on other side
of the fog-curtain
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Wed Nov 25, 2009 4:40 pm

of the fog curtain-
I can not lift it higher,
blow through and catch me.
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Thu Nov 26, 2009 4:39 pm

“Blow through and catch me”,
it called to the trombonist.
Then the note was gone.
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Thu Nov 26, 2009 7:27 pm

then the note was gone
although she listened hard
simple silence sang.
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Fri Nov 27, 2009 5:54 pm

Simple silence sang
in a timeless, faultless voice,
beyond our hearing.
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Fri Nov 27, 2009 7:51 pm

beyond your hearing
capable hands close to rest,
"forget it" she said.
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Fri Nov 27, 2009 10:20 pm

“Forget it.”, she said,
reaching for her book instead.
I just hung my head.
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Fri Nov 27, 2009 10:32 pm

I just hung my head,
I just hung my head and cried
hung my head, then lied.
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Sun Nov 29, 2009 7:33 am

hung my head, then lied
to my shadow; winter breezed
through skeleton bones
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Sun Nov 29, 2009 8:39 am

through skeleton bones
he's peering with blood stained eyes
sins of his father.
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Mon Nov 30, 2009 3:10 pm

sins of his father
grim clouds
grimmer windows
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Mon Nov 30, 2009 3:23 pm

grimmer windows
broken views of your face-
always tomorrows.
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always tomorrows
buds watch out
weather bulletins
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