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Sat Dec 05, 2009 8:24 am

To my Glorious Leaders, Holders of the Golden Nasial Hairs,
The Grand Studious Thoughts of the Pungent; The Angelica;
David, Elphin, select Sam, Rosé, Sharra,
I was wondering when i was up for parole;
In terms of a position as one who moderates these boards;
My CV is as follows’’’’’’
I spent some time in a mental instruction;
For trying to kill this bastard; because he tryed to shoot me because i fucked his misses;
some people are just so fucken devoide of humour;
I was caught, because he made a dreadful noise that must be 10 points;
I’am an alcoholic, so my mind is totally elevated alive;
I have put a box of bad manners in the freezer and blue the top off the fucken freezer;
I have loved, because of vigera; the bullets that load the man-hammer;
I have watched a man die, when his lungs bubble, and blood, oh the fucken blood,
I’ve stopped a girl from jumping, not me the police did,
I have a ghostly challenger to my life, my dreams;
I can suck any size cock that was put in front of me when i was young; so i did learn something; I stand on a mountain of dreams;
My inheritance is the life of the dust hermit;
My attendance in life, is magistrate perfect;
I have been before the day of judgement and it’s not god; he has lond hair;
I have cut a man’s lunch;
And the strongest fire of all is Shakespeare;
What a fucken piece of etymology he was along with,( ray and his daughters,(fuck,) and david and ros Suzanne, Pauline, lovely,
Kimbob, trang, even tamera beyl- what fuck, young sharra);
We are here for the poetry, we fucket it, we drink it, poetry is our pillow;
Just because i get stuck into ros it does mean i don’t like her poetry.
I’am shore she is 100 carats worth diamond;
when i’am so pissed i can navigate to the same spot always even if its ends
Up on the floor,now that's must be 100 points'
If you don’t like somebody you don’t fuck with them;
You tell them straight; poetry is my mistress; the fluid in the can; the walk i take with my dogs; my life my eveyday;the only thing that stops me from wanking, is poetry, your poetry;
there is for me no other poetry than your poetry i wish i had met this barry; this poet;
this immortale;
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 10:25 am

Re: you

Wow. How are we supposed to respond to this? In fact, does it require a reply, or is purely rhetorical?

We do miss Barry, though.

David
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 10:27 am

HI Tool
lots to get off your chest in this one it seems to me. Maybe this forum isn't the place to post such personal stuff as I suspect you are not after a critique here, I could be wrong. There are some good bits in the piece. I agree that Shakespeare is the strongest fire.

Take care of yourself and don't let the bastards grind you down.

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Sun Dec 06, 2009 1:49 am

if i put it in this colom it is a poem
i write it as a poem

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Sun Dec 06, 2009 7:27 am

Loved the rant. Could the title be: "Shakespeare is my fire"? Smiles.
Enjoyable stuff.
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Sun Dec 06, 2009 8:50 am

thanks for that

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