Mirage Cherita

[arunansu]

our eyes meet

Bedouin inspects
aeolian landforms

a restless camel
hastens toward
unreachable oasis

[Dalena]

Bravo Arunasu

So much to experience in a small package...camels seem to be popular here today...
I partic liked the unreachable oasis....I couldn't help seeing a mirage rippling in the distance and trying to decide if it's a trick of the light
or thirst quenching.....I'm sure the camel would know....aren't they supposed to be clever like that?

thanx

Dalena x

[arunansu]

Thank you so much for the encouragement, Dalena.

[qwertyportne]

arunansu,

Your poem is a fine example of both how and why less is often more. If anybody ever asks me how poetry differs from prose, I'll suggest they read your Mirage Cherita. Just 11 words. That's a pretty high evoke/convey ratio!

I enjoy poems that make me do some of the work to get at the meaning and how the meaning is conveyed. Your poem certainly compelled me to think as well as feel. At first read, for example, it seemed like a simple, straight-forward setting. On second read, however, I realized that the images were, at least for me, richly ambiguous.

Another pleasant surprise was that I had never seen the phrase aeolian landforms. After Googling the phrase, I discovered that I had seen aeoilan landforms -- in the Mojave desert near where I live. Thanks for posting this. I look forward to reading more poetry from you...

-Bill

[arunansu]

Thank you so much for the appreciation, Bill. Smiles.

[Ros]

Enjoyed greatly, arunansu. Very nicely done.

Ros

[arunansu]

Thank you Ros for the appreciation of the piece.

[anniecat]

Clever.
Short and sweet, i can see the mirage and feel the heat, well done.
Love those looked up words.

[arunansu]

Thank you Anniecat for the reply and the time. Smiles.