Haiku Train

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Thu Dec 10, 2009 2:35 pm

Under the lamplight
jerkily by mind's duress
a poem is born
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Sat Dec 12, 2009 4:38 am

a poem is born
bending over the sheep
in tranqual setting is shorn
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Sun Dec 13, 2009 1:31 pm

in tranquil setting is shorn,
stripped of individuallity.
Just another lemming.
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Sun Dec 13, 2009 5:08 pm

just another lemming
to jump to death and beyond
must fence the cliff edge
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Mon Dec 14, 2009 10:26 pm

must fence the cliff edge,
board my windows,
close my mouth.
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Mon Dec 14, 2009 11:47 pm

pauline5 wrote:must fence the cliff edge,
board my windows,
close my mouth.
must fence the cliff edge................5 words
board all my open windows................7
close my great big mouth.............5

Got to keep the train running. :D
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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Mon Dec 14, 2009 11:58 pm

Close my great big mouth
i might catch a giant fly
through my teeth, hope not
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Tue Dec 15, 2009 10:07 am

through my teeth, hope not
with my tongue, I will speak not;
it need not be said.
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Tue Dec 15, 2009 1:36 pm

it need not be said.
not yet the day will come though
when all things calm down
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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When all things calm down
the ascent of man will pass;
the warm earth is still.
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Wed Dec 16, 2009 8:33 pm

the warm earth is still
before volcano erupts
they stare in silence
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Fri Dec 18, 2009 1:12 pm

They stare in silence
watching the bursts of hells fire
shoot from out the depths
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Sat Dec 19, 2009 2:25 pm

shot from the depths
how many poems
must feed the moon?
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Sat Dec 19, 2009 6:56 pm

must feed the moon
her bright face gazing at you;
let's not sleep tonight.
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Let's not sleep tonight;
make turbulent love til dawn:
doze the breakfast light.
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Sat Dec 19, 2009 7:52 pm

doze the breakfast light
room service wheels down the hall;
a weekend retreat
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A weekend retreat
in a cold January
creates it's own warmth.
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Sun Dec 20, 2009 3:25 am

creates it's own warmth
barn swallows nestled in eaves
our hands, one mitten.
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"One mitten twice shy"
he said because he couldn't
resist temptation!
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Sun Dec 20, 2009 1:50 pm

Resist temptation?
The soles of her feet tingle;
never a good sign.
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Mon Dec 21, 2009 11:35 am

never a good sign
this urge to fly, touch the sun;
tightly hold the string.
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tightly hold the string
lest your imagined eagle
carries you aloft.
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Tue Dec 22, 2009 10:09 am

carries you aloft
petite feather
this arctic wind
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Tue Dec 22, 2009 6:18 pm

this arctic wind
is far too cold for my feet
so snow shoes i think
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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Wed Dec 23, 2009 5:13 pm

So, snow shoes, I think
I can safely discard you,
my downtrodden friends.
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