Thrill Is Gone (Haiku)

[firefly]

Arid affection,

Brittle consumation, dry -

Rasping delusion.

[arunansu]

Honestly, I'm a bit confused on this, though liking it immensely at the same time. Are you sure its "arrid"? I searched in the Net and came across Arrid deodorants! Your last two lines make it more of a Senryu like experience. So far as I know, Haiku is more "objective". Smiles.
Enjoyed.

[firefly]

How very embarrassing! First poem posted here and first spelling mistake too. I have duly corrected it now. Thanks arunansu for pointing it out, hope it makes more sense now.
I suppose this really is more Senryu than Haiku. Oh dear, I'm not off to a very good start here at Poet's Graves am I!

[David]

Don't fret, firefly. First impressions are infinitely changeable.

I don't know much about haiku, but it strikes me that shorter words might be better. Don't waste those syllables, you've only got so many.

Cheers

David

[Arian]

I’m afraid I’m no aficionado of haiku, either, though this piece tells a story of disillusionment concisely and neatly.

I presume you mean consummation, by the way?

Anyhow, thanks for posting.
cheers

peter

[anniecat]

Well i think it was ok and means something, i was married once upon a time, hmm enough said.
Keep posting and welcome

[anniecat]

Oh! and catch the train.

[Lovely]

My best mate BB king. He his truly brilliant.

I won't say more.



Thanks

[Suzanne]

This is quite sad and I found it interesting when read after your high water poem. One has so much water and the other is so very dry.
Interesting things going on this week in your mind. lol. I liked the word rasping.

Suzanne

[Lake]

Hi firefly,

You've got that 5/7/5, byt I find it is very rare to have three -ion words in a three-line haiku.

Lake