Don't cast your love on me
i'm not worth it, don't you see
shallow person me.
Don't
shallow you?
Never thought I'd become
shallower
Very nice vignette, Anniecat. Great play of emotions here.
Never thought I'd become
shallower
Very nice vignette, Anniecat. Great play of emotions here.
Ah, don't go running yourself down, Annie. There's always plenty of other people that are happy to do that for you.
This is maybe a bit short. Could you big it up a bit? And while you're about it, big yourself up a bit as well.
Cheers
David
This is maybe a bit short. Could you big it up a bit? And while you're about it, big yourself up a bit as well.
Cheers
David
Hello anniecat,
My first post, so I'll try and be useful!
I like the shortness of your poem, I symbolises the shallowness you speak of. But this is aesthetic, if you look at the emotion in the poem it's not. There is self-examination. And the 'shallow person me' sounds kind of childish- but in a poetic way.
I noticed that you included the word 'cast' in your poem. Does this mean you are infatuated by this person but don't feel good enough? Maybe infatuation evokes those sorts of feelings, because love may not be recipricated.
Also are you spiritual? The word 'cast' is really standing out to me!
My first post, so I'll try and be useful!
I like the shortness of your poem, I symbolises the shallowness you speak of. But this is aesthetic, if you look at the emotion in the poem it's not. There is self-examination. And the 'shallow person me' sounds kind of childish- but in a poetic way.
I noticed that you included the word 'cast' in your poem. Does this mean you are infatuated by this person but don't feel good enough? Maybe infatuation evokes those sorts of feelings, because love may not be recipricated.
Also are you spiritual? The word 'cast' is really standing out to me!