Haiku Train

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Sat Dec 08, 2007 3:43 pm

Power of numbers
overwhelms common sense - Who'll
win the lottery?
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Win the lottery?
Sure, I'm game for that! Go buy
me a winner. Now!
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Me, a winner. Now
everyone looks at me with
new eyes, but myself.
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New eyes, but myself,
old ones. I envy each new
child for what they have.
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Tue Dec 11, 2007 3:26 am

Child, for what they have
done to you, do the same to
them. An eye for eye.
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Tue Dec 18, 2007 2:11 pm

Them? An eye for eye?
And a nay for nay, says I -
That's gobbledegook.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 2:47 am

That's gobbledegook?
Old Testament laws call for
writer to be stoned.
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 2:51 am

writer to be stoned
laws to be cut into stone
writer should be stoned
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 3:02 am

Writer should be stoned
before writing the sequel -
gazing into space.
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 3:10 am

gazing into space,
goldfish swam round hs castle,
and gazed into space
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 3:21 am

..and gazed into space -
his mind being sucked into
various black holes.
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 3:35 am

Various black holes
sucked in the world's biggest banks -
Piggy banks are sound.
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 3:49 pm

Piggy banks are sound -
not the echoing hollow
sound of Northern Rock.
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Elphin
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Sound of Northern Rock.
Is it same as Northern Soul
or different beat?
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Wed Dec 19, 2007 11:58 pm

Or different beat,
from a different drummer,
The Stones: Charlie Watts.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Thu Dec 20, 2007 11:17 am

The Stones: Charlie Watts
keeps a strange beat when he drums.
Pipe and slippers time.
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Thu Dec 20, 2007 11:40 am

Pipe and slippers time -
He plays the pipe but slippers
on a dead haggis.
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Thu Dec 20, 2007 5:31 pm

On a dead haggis,
the old hag hagged out a meal,
it was disgusting.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Thu Dec 20, 2007 5:36 pm

It was disgusting.
Chieftan of the pudding race -
offal, oats and guts
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Thu Dec 20, 2007 7:04 pm

offal, oats and guts -
birds busy pecking. Nature
takes care of itself.
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Thu Dec 20, 2007 9:13 pm

Takes care of itself,
combs its hair down to its feet,
thats our Cousin It.

(You know, from the "Adams Family")
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Fri Dec 21, 2007 2:10 am

That's our Cousin It.
Earns extra money mopping -
impaled on a stick.
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Sat Dec 22, 2007 6:12 am

impaled on a stick
and submerged deep in hot oil
delicious corn dogs
kozmikdave
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Sat Dec 22, 2007 6:30 am

delicious corn dogs
dismember child's corn dolly -
incur vodon wrath.
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Incur vodon wrath,
now George is a pin cushion,
cheated on a witch.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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