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kozmikdave
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Wed Jan 30, 2008 8:12 am

About to be served
generic brands of road kill,
the dog donned his bib.
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Wed Jan 30, 2008 11:56 am

The dog donned his bib,
licked his chops, took out a fork,
'Kitty A La King'.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Wed Jan 30, 2008 12:35 pm

Kitty A La King
with side of duck a l'orange-
a carnivore lunch
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Wed Jan 30, 2008 5:32 pm

A carnivore lunch,
a wild one, consists of raw
meat chewed to the bone.
kozmikdave
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Thu Jan 31, 2008 12:09 pm

Meat chewed to the bone -
result of blender diving.
Swith off, then retrieve!
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Sat Feb 02, 2008 11:39 am

Switch off, then retrieve
clumps of thought and fantasy.
Untangle in sleep.
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Sat Feb 02, 2008 10:22 pm

Untangle in sleep -
let not the grazing sheep stretch
imagination.
juliadebeauvoir
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Mon Feb 04, 2008 6:41 am

Imagination
is a hot commodity.
Best with inflation.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Mon Feb 04, 2008 3:33 pm

Best with inflation -
the world of balloons, but not
the world of egos.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
juliadebeauvoir
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Mon Feb 04, 2008 6:02 pm

The world of egos,
likened to the world of eggs,
cracked and undercooked.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
kozmikdave
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 6:14 am

Cracked and undercooked
pottery below the soil
enriches our past.
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 12:01 pm

Enriches our past,
bright beacons of the future,
kids are a blessing.
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 3:28 pm

Kids are a blessing
for which we must pay a tithe
for ever, Amen.
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 8:21 pm

For ever, Amen -
How long's that going to take?
I've not got all day!
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 10:00 pm

“I've not got all day!”
“You haven’t got what all day?
Would you specify?”
kozmikdave
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 10:12 pm

Would you specify
who, what, when, where, your surprise
party details, please?
juliadebeauvoir
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Wed Feb 06, 2008 2:28 am

Party details, please...
Who was there? Who wore what? What???
So glad I stayed home!
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Wed Feb 06, 2008 5:17 pm

So glad I stayed home!
So was he away from home!
The strange bedfellows.
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Thu Feb 07, 2008 11:20 pm

The strange bedfellows,
Could eat no fat, she no lean.
Jack Sprat and his wife.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
kozmikdave
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 3:48 am

Jack Sprat and his wife -
he, with gall bladder removed,
she, fat and jolly.
juliadebeauvoir
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 4:02 am

She, fat and jolly,
Rubenesque,round pretty face,
goddess in her time.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Mon Feb 11, 2008 1:28 am

Goddess in her time,
at least to me anyway.
Beautiful creature.
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Mon Feb 11, 2008 3:10 am

Beautiful creature
only in some people’s eyes
ugly in other’s
kozmikdave
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Mon Feb 11, 2008 11:38 am

...ugly in other’s
opinions, but beautiful
in each other's arms.
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Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:17 pm

in each other's arms
the vines twine around the tree
which leads them upward
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