Haiku Train

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Lake
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Fri Mar 07, 2008 8:16 pm

haiku vandalism -
bad karma. Cannot be found
in a Zen garden
TDF
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Fri Mar 07, 2008 9:11 pm

in a zen garden
gravel lanscape rake waves form
old man sits content
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Sat Mar 08, 2008 2:43 am

old man sits content
until old woman finds jobs -
"Rake those stones again!"
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Sat Mar 08, 2008 5:33 pm

Rake those stones again
always rake those bloody stones
man, do I hate stones
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Sun Mar 09, 2008 5:28 am

"Man, I do hate stones!"
she was kolpophobic, and
he aichmophobic.
TDF
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Tue Mar 11, 2008 7:37 pm

he aichmophobic?
(found meaning through google search)
unlucky couple!
meh and bah are wonderful words
Lake
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Wed Mar 12, 2008 7:28 pm

unlucky couple
ideal partner in the world
the cat and the mouse
kozmikdave
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Thu Mar 13, 2008 9:07 am

the cat and the mouse -
territorial wars! Now
the mouse owns the mat.
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Thu Mar 13, 2008 3:41 pm

the mouse owns the mat.
the cat wanted to buy it,
but had bad credit.
meh and bah are wonderful words
kozmikdave
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Sun Mar 16, 2008 3:16 am

...but had bad credit -
bailiffs came when banks foreclosed -
forced minimalism.
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barrie
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Tue Mar 18, 2008 12:56 pm

"Forced minimalism"
has six syllables - it's not
minimalism.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
kozmikdave
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Tue Mar 18, 2008 9:23 pm

minimalisum?
Five for you but four for me.
I've been short change-ed.
Travis
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Sat Mar 22, 2008 11:40 pm

I've been short change-ed.
Call it birth if you will. Thrown,
still rolling along.
ccvulture

Sun Mar 23, 2008 12:29 am

For an ice-cold beer
take a beer and add two cubes
of ice from the tray.
kozmikdave
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Mon Mar 24, 2008 6:46 am

Agggghhhhh! "ice from the tray?"
Select Samaritan wrote,
"still rolling along."


Note: ccvulture got his start line from the end of page one - apparently we are now on page 205 - easy mistake to make.
Lake
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Mon Mar 24, 2008 1:59 pm

still rolling along
with puffs and huffs, the gray train
vanished in distance
kozmikdave
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Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:16 am

Vanished in distance -
perspective draws us closer
as time chugs past us.
Elphin
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Wed Mar 26, 2008 10:05 am

As time chugs past us
its straight line warps as it jumps
on a bendy bus
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Wed Mar 26, 2008 10:44 am

on a bendy bus
we ride not forgetting time
into the jaws of
kozmikdave
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Thu Mar 27, 2008 9:05 am

Into the jaws of
the vice, I secured the screw -
new cork remover.
Lake
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Thu Mar 27, 2008 4:06 pm

new cork remover
means more bottles of liquor
in his old stomach
Travis
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Thu Mar 27, 2008 10:30 pm

In his old stomach
there sits a drunken fly with
many tales to tell.
Lake
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Thu Mar 27, 2008 11:54 pm

many tales to tell -
many are stale to the ear
earplugs are on sale
thoke
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Sat Mar 29, 2008 9:29 am

Earplugs are on sale
for two pence each at gigs
in Utopia.
Travis
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Sun Mar 30, 2008 12:14 am

In Utopia
I read a dystopian
novel. Ironic.
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