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Tue Oct 21, 2008 4:03 pm

in every blue dip
of the old woman's thin hair,
her heart grew younger.
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 4:14 pm

her heart grew younger
as her children grew older.
Now they switch their roles.
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 4:39 pm

Now they switch their roles,
cross-dressing becomes the norm.
The serpent's confused.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 5:36 pm

The serpents confused,
as the worm that the crow bit
in half has changed. Hughes?
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 6:52 pm

in half has changed. Hughes?
A quarter already is
change, in the US!
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 7:08 pm

Change, in the US,
begins with Joe the Plumber,
Not John or Barry.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PUvwKVvp3-o
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 7:12 pm

Not John or Barry,
just plain old average Joe.
Now he is famous.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 8:00 pm

Now he is famous
smoothly sails to Uranus
in a ship of sand
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 8:08 pm

In a ship of sand
the hourglass is always king,
time's waters ticking.
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 8:22 pm

Time's waters ticking,
clutched in the white hands of death,
the black hands shatter
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 8:27 pm

the black hands shatter
Saruman spilt his dinner
Ent marches on home
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Tue Oct 21, 2008 8:38 pm

Ent marches on home,
while tree-beard gathers hobbits
in his thin, stick arms.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 2:23 pm

In his thin stick arms
Lowry's Lancashire model
picked up his pint glass.
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 3:31 pm

picked up his pint glass,
and slowly set it back down;
brandy called his name.
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 3:36 pm

Brandy called his name,
but it could have been Whisky -
He wasn't sure who.
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 4:21 pm

He wasn't sure who.
His head was too clouded with
drink, to comprehend.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 4:29 pm

Drink to comprehend?
I always drink to forget,
said the President.
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 4:46 pm

Said the president,
forgetting where he was, while
the world heard, in shock.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 8:07 pm

The world heard, in shock
it was made in seven days.
Palintology

(sorry I just realised there was a post a few days back using the Palintology line - not very original on my part but I'll leave it up and see where it leads)
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Wed Oct 22, 2008 10:32 pm

Palintology
Joe the plumber of the world
What is the next card?
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Thu Oct 23, 2008 12:09 pm

What is the next card
with election day so near?
The Fool, I should think.
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Thu Oct 23, 2008 2:00 pm

The Fool I should think,
not Hamlet, or his uncle.
The Fool stands, laughing.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Thu Oct 23, 2008 2:06 pm

The Fool stands laughing,
blind as to what he's doing.
Sounds familiar.
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Thu Oct 23, 2008 3:07 pm

"Sounds familiar,"
she thought as he told her why
he would not post bail.
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Thu Oct 23, 2008 6:01 pm

He would not post bail.
So he stood by and jangled
the bells on his hat.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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