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oranggunung
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Fri Nov 28, 2008 8:30 am

“Thanking you … er, thanks.”
Not a classic awards speech;
Not a classic film.
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Fri Nov 28, 2008 8:25 pm

Not a classic film
but a contemporary
PG-13 film
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Sat Nov 29, 2008 6:14 pm

PG-13 film -
death takes place off-camera,
blood is rarely seen.
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Sat Nov 29, 2008 6:23 pm

Blood is rarely seen
in a cold creature. So
never expect that.
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Sat Nov 29, 2008 8:20 pm

Never expect that,
you should ever expect to
never expect that.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Mon Dec 01, 2008 7:23 pm

(wow what fun! I've never written a haiku before! I'm new so I hope you don't mind if I join in here. Okay so here goes:)

Never expect that
I would not allow you to
Because we're not fair
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Mon Dec 01, 2008 10:38 pm

because we're not fair.
Who is? I cheat because I
dont love her darling.
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Tue Dec 02, 2008 12:18 am

Don't love her darling
Or goodbye will daunt you when
The switch is turned off.
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Tue Dec 02, 2008 12:43 pm

The switch is turned off,
obviously for a reason,
shall I turn it on?
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Tue Dec 02, 2008 10:17 pm

Shall I turn it on?
Procrastination foils me!
No T.V. this time.
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Wed Dec 03, 2008 1:08 am

No T.V this time.
How much drama do I need?
My life is enough
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Wed Dec 03, 2008 10:07 am

My life is enough,
I ponder life’s misfortunes?
Got to earn my crust!
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Wed Dec 03, 2008 10:36 am

Got to earn my crust!
Bread does not come cheap these days!
Strictly sad, but true.
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Wed Dec 03, 2008 1:16 pm

Strictly sad, but true,
I want to be Scooby Doo.
But hate Scraggy Doo!
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Thu Dec 04, 2008 11:16 pm

But hate Scraggy do!
Hate is the mother of us!
Your mother and mine
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Fri Dec 05, 2008 12:34 pm

Your mother and mine,
hanging out clothes on the line
there was a fist fight.


Old American (maybe British) child's diplomacy song when trying to choose another child for a game, job, etc. Kind of like Eenie Meanie Miney Moe:
"My mother and your mother were hanging out clothes.
My mother punched your mother in the nose.
What color was the blood?
(child shouts out any color)
Red!
Red! R-E-D spells red and you are not it"!
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Fri Dec 05, 2008 5:58 pm

There was a fist fight.
Your mother won, and she was
rewarded with jail.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Fri Dec 05, 2008 6:36 pm

Rewarded with jail.
Im an awkward male, I like
this school, it's my house.
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Fri Dec 05, 2008 11:11 pm

This school, it’s my house.
I’m here, even at weekends.
I may have to move.
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Sat Dec 06, 2008 12:08 am

I may have to move
In days of far off futures.
I remain for now.
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Sat Dec 06, 2008 8:01 am

I remain for now,
tomorrow, I could be gone.
Not content to stay.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Sat Dec 06, 2008 12:33 pm

Not content to stay
at office Christmas party.
Lets get out of here!
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Sun Dec 07, 2008 1:23 am

Let's get out of here!
Acknowledge our attraction,
Find a room somewhere
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Sun Dec 07, 2008 4:16 pm

find a room somewhere
where nobody knows, except
our internal mind
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Mon Dec 08, 2008 2:40 pm

Our internal mind
has bad claustrophobia -
time to let it out.
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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