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thicker than water
but it was not thick enough
Thursday's split pea soup.
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Tue Feb 10, 2009 6:00 pm

Thursday's split pea soup,
has clogged up the kitchen sink.
I'll fetch the plunger.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Wed Feb 11, 2009 2:17 am

I'll fetch the plunger
And you'll fetch the bleach to clean
The filthy bathroom
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Wed Feb 11, 2009 3:40 am

The filthy bathroom
stayed that way because the wife
was sick of cleaning.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Wed Feb 11, 2009 11:31 am

Was "sick of cleaning"
A good excuse to let the
Kids catch viruses?
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Thu Feb 12, 2009 10:53 pm

Kids catch viruses,
head lice, veruccas, scabies -
you’ve got to love them!
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Fri Feb 13, 2009 12:01 am

You've got to love them
And you've got to love them now.
Or you never will.
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 9:30 am

Or you never will.
You'll watch them getting married,
from a far distance.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 10:40 am

from a far distance
you will watch them rip and tear
at their shoes and socks
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 10:49 am

at their shoes and socks
he smiled and watched the return
of an acquaintance.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 11:07 am

Of an acquaintance
not neccessarily good,
or at all wanted.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 12:10 pm

“… or a tall, wanted
fugitive?” “Can you repeat?
I missed some of that.”
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 12:14 pm

I missed some of that
I got sick of some of this
I never went home
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Sun Feb 15, 2009 1:18 pm

I never went home
'cos my mother's tone was off
she slapped at my face
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She slapped at my face
Creamed at the top of her lungs
Chased me out the door
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Mon Feb 16, 2009 7:16 pm

chased me out the door
with a pendulum and broom;
the ghost in my dream.
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Mon Feb 16, 2009 8:39 pm

The ghost in my dream
Temporomandibular
My joint dysfunction
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Tue Feb 17, 2009 2:26 pm

My joint dysfunction –
though I breathed out trippy smoke,
I did not inhale.
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Tue Feb 17, 2009 6:05 pm

I did not inhale
I held my breath for two years
things did not work out.
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Tue Feb 17, 2009 9:09 pm

Things did not work out.
The next time I exhaled, I
knocked someone over.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Feb 17, 2009 9:18 pm

Knocked someone over.
Didn't catch the poor sod's name.
I didn't have to.
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Wed Feb 18, 2009 3:22 pm

I didn't have to
but I wanted to touch it-
hold it in my hand.
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Wed Feb 18, 2009 3:29 pm

hold it in my hand
now carefully draw it up
mustard on my arm
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Wed Feb 18, 2009 4:48 pm

mustard on my arm;
inattention to detail
at the carnival.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Wed Feb 18, 2009 4:59 pm

At the carnival,
red and gold lights, screaming, and
candyfloss of course.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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