Haiku Train

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Sat Mar 07, 2009 5:38 pm

Open them, you're here!
Mirage or an illusion?
My wishful thinking.
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Sat Mar 07, 2009 6:42 pm

My wishful thinking;
Capricious desire rendered
Ineffectual
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Sun Mar 08, 2009 3:55 pm

ineffectual,
powerless, inadequate-
there were secrets kept.
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Sun Mar 08, 2009 4:49 pm

There were secrets kept.
What made you feel you couldn't
Talk to me. I'm Here.
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Mon Mar 09, 2009 5:11 pm

Talk to me, I'm here
in your little box of toys,
that's where I will stay.
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Mon Mar 09, 2009 10:37 pm

That's where I will stay
Till the lonely moon shines here
Then I'll know you well
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Tue Mar 10, 2009 9:48 pm

Then: I'll know you well.
Now: I don't have a fucking clue.
what is that about?
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Tue Mar 10, 2009 10:25 pm

What is that about?
Men on the streets begging for
Money to buy fags.
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Tue Mar 10, 2009 11:11 pm

Money to buy Fags,
paid to back-bench hypocrits
kerbcrawling Soho.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Wed Mar 11, 2009 5:34 am

Kerbcrawling Soho
Pumped full of E's. Energy.
Adrenaline rush.
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Wed Mar 11, 2009 8:15 pm

Adrenaline rush.
please, rush, I'm so damn tired.
And look! there's danger!
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Wed Mar 11, 2009 11:37 pm

and look there's danger
in those wailing children --
no stopping it now
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 12:17 am

no stopping it now
no stopping ever at all
sleep will catch you up
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 12:30 am

sleep will catch you up
and pull you into lakes --
Zen moons will beam down
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 1:16 am

Zen moons will beam down,
the casualness of sunlight
running will shatter.
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 1:52 am

Running Will shattered
his icy coolpants --
he sang as he laughed
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 7:22 am

He sang as he laughed
A vocal phenomenon
They christened it slang
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 5:06 pm

They christened it slang,
which confused the boy who spoke
colloquially.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 8:29 pm

colloquially,
me nah care 'bout dat fool, blud
but really I do.
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 12:31 pm

But I really do
And now I'd really like to
I'd really love to
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 4:29 pm

I'd really love to
but I am afraid of flying
would you hold my hand?
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 5:50 pm

would you hold my hand?
while the other occupies
your mind completely.
Last edited by Danté on Fri Mar 13, 2009 6:32 pm, edited 1 time in total.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 6:24 pm

Your mind completely
enslaved. Will power cannot
help you anymore.
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 8:57 pm

Help! You anymore
suited than me to be a
parent of six kids?
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 10:42 pm

Parent of six kids -
What you doing next Sunday?
You could take eight more!
Just because you're paranoid it doesn't mean they're not out to get you.
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