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Thu Oct 01, 2009 3:09 pm

antennae aloft
two giant grasshoppers
breathe the morning
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Thu Oct 01, 2009 3:26 pm

breathe the morning
feel the spill of Light
on your temple
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Sat Oct 03, 2009 8:30 am

on Your temple pinnacle
two white doves
sit through the day
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Sat Oct 03, 2009 4:11 pm

sit through the day
green mountains and white clouds
facing each other
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Sun Oct 04, 2009 12:13 pm

facing each other
moon and a mountain
autumn's first week
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Mon Oct 05, 2009 12:23 pm

autumn's first week
the fall curtains
moon's face
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Mon Oct 05, 2009 1:50 pm

moon's face -
a polished stone
cold as porcelain
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Tue Oct 06, 2009 5:44 am

cold as porcelain
her look
in the evening tide
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Tue Oct 06, 2009 3:19 pm

in the evening tide
moonbeams shimmer and dissolve
the waters sparkle
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Tue Oct 06, 2009 3:50 pm

the waters sparkle
stream down her naked body
a lotus rises
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Wed Oct 07, 2009 5:25 am

a lotus rises
with the morning glow
dew settles on her skin
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Wed Oct 07, 2009 6:34 pm

Dew settles on her skin
outside the ancient synagogue.
Almost an old joke.
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Wed Oct 07, 2009 9:28 pm

Almost an old joke
himself, the middle-aged clown
tripped up and fell down.
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Thu Oct 08, 2009 5:40 am

tripped up and fell down
cursed his life, banged a door
with clenched fist
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Sat Oct 10, 2009 5:02 am

with clenched fist
David threatened Goliath
his fiery eyes
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Sat Oct 10, 2009 3:35 pm

his fiery eyes
softened as he reached for
touch-me-not
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touch-me-not
quipped a bluebird
then fled
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Sun Oct 11, 2009 4:24 pm

Then fledgling birds may
cast off their porcelain shells.
Spring will come once more.
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Sun Oct 11, 2009 10:40 pm

Spring will come once more
when winter releases its
cold and icy grip.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 4:42 am

cold and icy grip
on my hand
her quivering lips
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:03 pm

Her quivering lips
As she sat in the laundry.
What time is he home?
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:38 pm

What time is he home?
is no longer her concern.
October snowfall.
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 8:20 pm

October snowfall
Is highly unusual
in rainy Devon.
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 9:02 pm

in rainy Devon
colourful mushrooms blooming
over busy streets
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Tue Oct 13, 2009 5:10 am

over busy streets
a hurrying Sun
9:00 hour
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