Haiku Train

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Tue Oct 13, 2009 9:57 am

9.00 hour.
Twelve, three, six o' clock and nine.
Dissolving our time.
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Tue Oct 13, 2009 3:38 pm

Dissolving our time
through the neck of an hour glass
sand trickles
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Tue Oct 13, 2009 3:48 pm

Sand trickles, tickles
like the feet of many ants.
I must change my pants.
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Wed Oct 14, 2009 5:12 am

I must change my pants.
I've waded through flooded lanes
filled with tears.
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Fri Oct 16, 2009 9:27 am

Filled with tears, the sky
is ripped and torn. Through the tears
fall many teardrops.
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Fri Oct 16, 2009 12:24 pm

fall many teardrops
throughout the night
stars burn down
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Fri Oct 16, 2009 1:00 pm

Stars burn down their mansions
On Hollywood Boulevard.
Cinema is dead.
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Fri Oct 16, 2009 7:21 pm

Cinema is dead -
we watch film
on-line
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Sat Oct 17, 2009 4:23 am

We watch film on-line,
wading into pop corn and
sofacose staring.
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Sat Oct 17, 2009 7:24 am

Sofacose staring
all the rage in Wisconsin.
We lead boring lives.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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"We lead boring lives"
said the termite to his friend.
"Boring to the end".
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Sun Oct 18, 2009 11:19 pm

boring to the end -
dropping the dead mouse, the cat
runs after a bird
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Mon Oct 19, 2009 12:35 pm

runs after a bird
a shadow
a pterodactyl
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Mon Oct 19, 2009 9:41 pm

A pterodactyl
spread skin across its fingers -
what a sleight of hand!
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Tue Oct 20, 2009 3:31 pm

what a sleight of hand
trees grass all one green
spring breeze
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Wed Oct 21, 2009 11:09 am

spring breeze
guides honeybees
towards sunflowers
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Wed Oct 21, 2009 3:13 pm

Towards "Sunflowers"
he stumbled, slicing his ear.
Then falling down drunk.
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Wed Oct 21, 2009 3:34 pm

Then falling down drunk
he whispered to Ganguin
his love for sunflowers
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Wed Oct 21, 2009 5:41 pm

his love for sunflowers
grows stronger as
the sun rises
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Thu Oct 22, 2009 9:29 am

the sun rises
born from a river; a Sadhu
lights a fresh cigar
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Thu Oct 22, 2009 10:08 am

Lights a fresh cigar,
thinks he looks so debonair,
coughs up a black lung.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Thu Oct 22, 2009 3:19 pm

coughs up a black lung
but continues to inhale
his voice rasps thinly
Can a selfish egocentric jealous and unimaginative female write a damn thing worthwhile?
-Sylvia Plath
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Thu Oct 22, 2009 9:56 pm

his voice rasps thinly
and his laugh grates terribly
he’s quite abrasive
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Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:22 am

he's quite abrasive
when he sprinkles your eyelids.
Who is the sand man?
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Sun Oct 25, 2009 1:50 pm

Who is the sand man?
storm rattles my windows
sparrow seeks shelter
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