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New to poetry? Unsure about the quality of your work? Then why not post here to receive some gentle feedback.
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Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:32 pm

what you do in life
depends on the shoes you wear
supplies you need.
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Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:36 pm

supplies you need
like the missing syllable
you probably want.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:51 pm

you probably want
to quit writing poetry
a lone voice cries out
Aim, then, to be aimless.
Seek neither publication, nor acclaim:
Submit without submitting.

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Fri Feb 05, 2010 6:56 pm

a lone voice cries out
deeply wounding many ears
they bleed in silence.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Fri Feb 05, 2010 7:46 pm

they bleed in silence
standing on opposite sides
as rain gushes down.
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Sat Feb 06, 2010 5:40 pm

As rain gushes down
the street side gutters of town,
I look up and frown.
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Sat Feb 06, 2010 5:51 pm

I look up and frown
at pubic hair and caffeine
a slap or a smile?
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Sat Feb 06, 2010 7:12 pm

a slap or a smile?
that is always the question
blue eyes whisper, "yes".
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 1:43 am

blue eyes whisper 'yes',
her neck arches,her head tilts
as she sighs 'oh yes'...
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 8:54 am

as she sighs 'oh yes'...
a car's heard in the driveway
she runs out the door.
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 1:27 pm

She runs out the door.
She's playing dangerous games,
someone will get hurt...
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 1:58 pm

someone will get hurt!
the bell on the hill rang out,
the men loaded guns.
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 2:11 pm

The men loaded guns
they waved them frighteningly
unsure where to aim.
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 5:52 pm

Unsure where to aim
he laid his gun on the ground
and cried in the dirt.
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 6:32 pm

and cried in the dirt
with micro-organisms
such a silly boy.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 2:03 pm

Such a silly boy.
Tears on micro organisms:
never germinate.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 2:26 pm

never germinate-
encasement holds dormant seed
spring will never come.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 3:28 pm

Spring will never come.
Sometimes in the frozen north
it can feel like that.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 3:35 pm

it can feel like that,
like your iced blood is stagnant ,
warm embers smothered.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 4:09 pm

warm embers smothered
over our hot potatoes
baking in the sand.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 4:32 pm

baking in the sand
strawhat covering her face
no wrinkles in time.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 4:40 pm

No wrinkles in time:
the past remains where it is,
we all move forward.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 4:49 pm

we all move forward
and i wonder where he went
his room is empty.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 4:56 pm

His room is empty
except for the restless ghost
calling from the past
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 5:09 pm

calling from the past
sighs from blue eyed stamped letters
deeply hidden scars.
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