Haiku Train

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Wed Sep 22, 2010 10:26 pm

Bedroom heat. Steel sliced
fresh mangos and passion fruit.
Oh, decadent days!
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Thu Sep 23, 2010 6:32 pm

Oh, decadent days!
Laughter under yellow eaves
all windows open.
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:53 am

All windows open
Air freshens musty corners
Saturday morning
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 10:42 am

Saturday morning-
longed for soft sunshine teases
sleepy eyelashes.
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 10:30 pm

sleepy eyelashes
dragging sagging eyelids closed
must pull off the road
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Mon Sep 27, 2010 5:09 pm

Must pull off the road.
Gotta take a piss real bad.
Do you see a place?
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Mon Sep 27, 2010 5:24 pm

Do you see a place?
You are so very funny,
Sir Samaritan !
Aim, then, to be aimless.
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Tue Sep 28, 2010 6:37 pm

Sir Samaritan,
if a chicken needed help,
would you cross the road?
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Thu Sep 30, 2010 10:21 am

Kind Samaritan,
saw the chicken needed help.
Ate it that same night.
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Thu Oct 07, 2010 11:47 pm

Would you cross the road
just to get to the other
side? Fuck yeah! Of course!
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Fri Oct 08, 2010 2:58 pm

the other side
of dark hemisphere
gets the sun
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Fri Oct 08, 2010 4:39 pm

gets the sun
rushes to the west
guess what he gets?
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Wed Oct 13, 2010 9:10 pm

Guess what he gets ...
a custodial sentence -
life in cyberspace.
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Thu Oct 14, 2010 1:24 am

Life in cyberspace -
we are back to nature, watch
insects in cobwebs
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:19 pm

Insects in cobwebs
spinning slowly down to die.
See? I recall Bread!
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Sat Oct 16, 2010 8:06 am

See? I recall Bread!
"found your diary underneath...
...reading about me."
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Sat Oct 16, 2010 10:19 am

reading about me
manuscripts migrate southwards
potential pastures
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Sat Oct 16, 2010 6:19 pm

Potential pastures
(green ones) are nowhere to be
found. Pessimism.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Sun Oct 17, 2010 4:38 am

found pessimism
in optimism, rainfall
in the sunny sky
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Sun Oct 17, 2010 10:27 am

In the sunny sky
Summer’s promise to return -
now it grows colder
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Sun Oct 17, 2010 10:48 am

now it grows colder
icicles get ambitious
awaiting the drip
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Fri Oct 22, 2010 11:51 pm

Awaiting the drip,
drip, drip, drip, drip, drip, drip, drip.
Love like a holed roof.
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Sat Oct 23, 2010 3:58 am

Love like a holed roof:
the drip, drip, drip, drip, drip, drip,
drip of jealousy.
fine words butter no parsnips
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Sat Oct 23, 2010 8:36 pm

drips of jealousy
fell from him, like acid rain
scarring all around
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Sun Oct 24, 2010 5:17 pm

Scarring all around,
results of nothing ventured,
and nothing really...
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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