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Fri Feb 11, 2011 10:02 pm

Stole her dancing shoes,
Left a pair of wooden clogs
North-West Morris rules!

http://www.themorrisring.org/more/nw.html :)

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Sun Feb 13, 2011 10:09 pm

North-West Morris rules:
dance, drink, dance, drink, dance, drink, drink
with a silly hat
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Mon Feb 14, 2011 7:35 pm

With a silly hat
I posed, giving the picture
a certain something.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Wed Feb 16, 2011 3:18 pm

a certain something
often uncertain to me -
to tell ducks from geese
Aim, then, to be aimless.
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Thu Feb 17, 2011 7:30 pm

to tell ducks from geese
he always graded his eggs
using a drainpipe
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Fri Feb 18, 2011 2:23 am

I haven't had a good laugh like this for the whole winter. Thanks, og.
And his eggs? :)
oranggunung wrote:to tell ducks from geese
he always graded his eggs
using a drainpipe
Aim, then, to be aimless.
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Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:03 pm

Using a drainpipe
he constructed another
haiku in this thread.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Fri Feb 18, 2011 11:30 pm

haiku in this thread
are like Japanese whispers;
ripples on the lake
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Sat Feb 19, 2011 4:21 am

ripples on the lake
murmur to a moon floating
in the dark water
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Sat Feb 19, 2011 9:02 am

In the dark water
the underbelly of life
swirling like the fish.
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swirling, like the fish
stirred the surface from below:
storms on Jupiter
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Sat Feb 19, 2011 11:56 am

Storms on Jupiter
Aquarius ties slipknots
Orion quivers.
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Mon Feb 21, 2011 3:44 pm

Orion quivers
at the edge of a torus -
event horizon
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Mon Feb 21, 2011 8:34 pm

Event horizon.
Gravitational lensing.
Terminology.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Tue Feb 22, 2011 6:16 pm

terminology
simple or esoteric
one’s dichotomy
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Fri Feb 25, 2011 6:38 pm

one’s dichotomy
so much depends upon one’s
new way of thinking
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Sat Feb 26, 2011 7:20 pm

new way of thinking
leave pre-conceptions at door
listen to the words
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listen to the words
that burst out of your body -
plum trees bloom in snow
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Mon Feb 28, 2011 8:49 pm

Plum trees bloom in snow
They don't want bees to visit
to snap their anthers
Before you shave with Occam’s razor - Try epilation or microlaser
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Sat Mar 05, 2011 7:12 pm

to snap their anthers
or rather burst them open
that is dehiscence
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Sun Mar 06, 2011 2:42 pm

that is dehiscence
the recrudescent seasons
emerge and unfold
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Mon Mar 07, 2011 4:32 am

Emerge and unfold
legs in the morning's shadows,
smiling, I see you.
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Smiling, I see you
smiling. I see you, smiling.
I see you: smiling.
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Tue Mar 08, 2011 5:34 pm

I see you smiling,
arms folded over your chest,
content observing.
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Fri Mar 11, 2011 10:16 pm

Content observing
he lurks silently in the
shadows, just watching.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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