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Tue Mar 19, 2013 3:18 pm

Missed her, Cameron?
Aim a little further to
the far far far right
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Mar 22, 2013 2:15 pm

The far, far, far right,
just beyond Herr Hitler, there,
on the mantelpiece.
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Thu Mar 28, 2013 10:27 pm

on the mantlepiece
tarnished urn lacking polish
ʎɹoʇsıɥ pǝsɹǝʌǝɹ
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Mar 29, 2013 10:30 pm

Reversed history,
just like Benjamin Button,
began at the end.
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Wed Apr 10, 2013 7:58 pm

began at the end
of winter, spring revived with
an April shower
Aim, then, to be aimless.
Seek neither publication, nor acclaim:
Submit without submitting.

一 Cameron
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Fri Apr 26, 2013 5:51 pm

An April Shower?
or tears for my lost youth?
my ship is sinking
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Sat May 04, 2013 1:23 am

my ship is sinking
in the April foggy clouds
an airplane takes off
Aim, then, to be aimless.
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Mon May 06, 2013 3:22 pm

An airplane takes off
her destination nowhere
The sky is crying
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Tue May 14, 2013 1:32 am

the sky is crying
tears streak the world around me
the wind is howling
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Fri May 31, 2013 5:55 pm

The wind is howling
a vortex of destruction
calm at the centre
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Sun Jun 02, 2013 9:52 am

calm at the centre
at least it seems so from the
event horizon
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Sun Jun 02, 2013 3:30 pm

event horizon
the laws of physics break down
a black hole in space
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Sun Jun 02, 2013 10:30 pm

a black hole in space
the comminuted cosmos
efficiently packed
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Mon Jun 03, 2013 3:56 pm

efficiently packed
saga holiday awaits
ready to escape
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Tue Jun 04, 2013 11:22 pm

ready to escape -
maximum velocity -
the astronaut waves
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Wed Jun 05, 2013 5:21 pm

the astronaut waves
poised for his EVA
singing Major Tom
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Fri Jun 07, 2013 5:33 pm

"singing Major Tom?
Can you hear me Major Tom?
...calling Major Tom..."
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Mon Jun 10, 2013 11:20 pm

calling Major Tom
a junkie may have sped his
meteoric fall
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Fri Jun 14, 2013 5:26 pm

meteoric fall
like an old Hollywood actress
best years behind her
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Tue Jun 18, 2013 10:58 pm

Best years behind her
Rooney was her only choice
WAGawannabe
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Thu Jun 20, 2013 4:53 pm

WAGawannabe
with an eye for the bling thing
and footballers' thighs
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Tue Jun 25, 2013 6:21 pm

and footballers’ thighs
are very cheap in July
why don’t you try one?
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Mon Jul 08, 2013 5:42 pm

why don't you try one?
it's chocolatey and hoppy
like Old Engine Oil
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Fri Jul 12, 2013 9:52 pm

like Old Engine Oil -
lubbly jubbly lubricant
fills little bottle
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Jul 12, 2013 10:51 pm

fills little bottle
at the race doctor’s behest -
exceeds the limit
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