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Wed Dec 04, 2013 11:24 am

"Is that wrong?" he asked.
Surplus syllabubs are wrong
if you're losing weight...
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Wed Dec 04, 2013 12:21 pm

if you're losing weight...
try a gastric band for size
or liposuction.
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Thu Dec 05, 2013 12:34 pm

"Or liposuction?"
I suggested with a smirk.
"That's extra..." she said.
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Fri Dec 06, 2013 8:38 am

"That's extra..." she said.
So I pulled out my wallet;
and found a fiver
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Fri Dec 06, 2013 4:24 pm

And found a fiver
could not grease the cogs of lust
in half lit bed sits.
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Fri Dec 06, 2013 6:40 pm

In half lit bed sits
human traffic is bound as
sex slaves for sale
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Tue Dec 10, 2013 5:01 pm

Sex slaves for sale?
Can I buy one get one free?
Oh, debauchery!
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Wed Dec 11, 2013 5:40 pm

Oh debauchery!
A life of self indulgence
and depravity
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Mon Dec 16, 2013 2:15 pm

and depravity
relies on currency too …
moral bankruptcy
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Tue Dec 17, 2013 9:31 pm

Moral Bankruptcy!
Too many sharks swimming.
They think greed is good!
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Fri Dec 20, 2013 3:10 pm

They think greed is good.
They don't have to sit with me
after Christmas pud!
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Fri Dec 20, 2013 6:22 pm

After Christmas Pud
I break a tooth on sixpence
and get flatulence!
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Mon Jan 06, 2014 6:57 pm

and get flatulence …
There must be an anagram!
Fete gullet’s cadence?
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Mon Jan 13, 2014 6:32 pm

Fete gullet’s cadence?
This must be an anagram
Who's got flatulence...?
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Fri Jan 17, 2014 8:23 am

Who's got flatulence...?
borborygmus a-go-go
and a royal flush
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Mon Jan 27, 2014 9:13 pm

and a royal flush
this must be an anagram...
Ray has a fun-doll?
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Sun Mar 02, 2014 10:25 am

Ray has a fun doll
their relationship’s strong, but
purely Platonic
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Fri Mar 07, 2014 7:06 pm

Purely platonic?
All we do is talk and talk
The nights are so cold.
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Sat Mar 15, 2014 5:33 pm

the nights are so cold
your parting words echoing
through my empty life
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Fri Mar 21, 2014 6:36 pm

Through my empty life
You float just beyond my grasp
Like high flying birds
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Fri May 23, 2014 8:41 am

Like high, flying birds;
domoic acid coursing
through innocent minds.
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Fri May 23, 2014 11:07 am

Through innocent minds
elephants, monkeys, and bears
all speak one language.
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Fri May 23, 2014 6:56 pm

all speak one language.
We are one humanity.
Third rock from the Sun.
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Sun Jun 01, 2014 12:31 pm

Third rock from the sun
just rolling along in an
eccentric orbit
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Sun Jun 01, 2014 4:04 pm

eccentric orbit
I roll downhill nowadays
but my direction varies
Rosencrantz: What are you playing at? Guildenstern: Words. Words. They're all we have to go on.
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