Haiku Train

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Mon Jul 21, 2014 6:21 am

Climb at your own risk

the crag of my impatience .

Barbed wire butterfly.
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Mon Jul 21, 2014 7:19 am

barbed wire butterfly
weary are your rust hinged wings
deep red petal perch.
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Mon Jul 21, 2014 7:48 am

deep red petal perch
the hoverfly hovering
in plumes of attar
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Mon Jul 21, 2014 8:01 am

In plumes of attar,
the space between filled with warmth.
Smile, and then a smile.
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Mon Jul 21, 2014 8:30 am

smile, and then a smile,
or simile of a smile …
the Cheshire Cat moon
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Tue Jul 22, 2014 12:09 pm

The Cheshire Cat: moon
faced and lowing cow-like in
the night-jar shadows.
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Tue Jul 22, 2014 1:45 pm

The night-jar shadows
were left on the windowsill.
I thought they would melt.
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Wed Jul 23, 2014 8:38 am

I thought they would melt
human forms- now ice pillars
stilled in cold distance
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Wed Jul 23, 2014 9:37 pm

stilled in cold distance
on the frozen horizon
cumulonimbus
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Wed Jul 23, 2014 11:32 pm

Cumulonimbus
he garbled with his mouth full
waiting for a bus
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Thu Jul 24, 2014 6:30 am

waiting for a bus
preoccupied man scowled brow
seated by sunshine
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Thu Jul 24, 2014 8:46 pm

seated by sunshine
we watch the mad dogs strolling
as the shadows shift
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Fri Jul 25, 2014 6:09 am

As the shadows shift
I pretend not to see you.
Fifty percent off.
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Fri Jul 25, 2014 3:19 pm

Fifty percent off
walking in circles again
wore soles twist my path
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Sat Jul 26, 2014 7:08 am

Wore soles twist my path.

No-one is riding the train.

I curse your madness.
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Sat Jul 26, 2014 9:53 am

I curse your madness
untouched bottles of relief
shelved in tidy rows
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Sat Jul 26, 2014 5:23 pm

Shelved in tidy rows
The Librarian takes pride
In a job well done
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
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Thu Jul 31, 2014 2:20 pm

In a job well done
there should always be some cheese,
wine, and a baguette.
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Thu Jul 31, 2014 4:03 pm

wine and a baguette
then more wine and a banquette …
sore head and regret
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Sat Aug 02, 2014 7:09 am

Sore head and regret.
Alcoholism and madness
lay down beside me.
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Sat Aug 02, 2014 9:06 am

Lay down beside me
brush sand from summer brown feet
picnic blanket dream
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Sat Aug 02, 2014 3:49 pm

Picnic blanket dream
Observe clouds in a blue sky
We lay together
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
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Sat Aug 02, 2014 9:06 pm

We lay together
watch dawn's shadows creep along
the amber silent walls
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Sun Aug 03, 2014 7:12 pm

Amber silent walls

unzip their lips and whisper

tantalizing lies.
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Mon Aug 04, 2014 2:27 pm

tantalizing lies
spilled by neon pink puckers
most ignored words fade
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