Haiku Train

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Pauline
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Thu Aug 07, 2014 6:28 am

Most ignored words fade.

Deep breaths and a cold shoulder.

Transient discomfort.
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Thu Aug 07, 2014 11:29 am

transient discomfort
the cold concrete stuffing of
high street mattresses
Pauline
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Thu Aug 07, 2014 7:33 pm

High street mattresses.

The pavements thick with summer

reluctant to leave.
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Fri Aug 08, 2014 5:08 pm

Reluctant to leave
Post holiday blues set in
The sun burns my skin
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Pauline
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Mon Aug 11, 2014 11:23 am

The sun burns my skin
but I'm not warm anymore.
Your touch leaves me cold.
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Mon Aug 11, 2014 8:26 pm

Your touch leaves me cold,
stripped of colour, leaf, then life,
waiting for the spring.
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Fri Aug 15, 2014 5:46 pm

waiting for the spring
mist suspended, cold iced air
buds frozen on vines
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Fri Aug 15, 2014 6:30 pm

Buds Frozen on vines
Stock up the wood pile before
Winter crashes in
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Sun Aug 17, 2014 1:15 pm

winter crashes, in-
distinct skid marks on black ice
dark, frozen moments
Pauline
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Thu Aug 21, 2014 7:51 pm

Dark, frozen moments

released from their confinement.

It's time to listen.
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Thu Aug 21, 2014 10:32 pm

It's time to listen
Old shows sound great on blu-ray
Watch without mother.
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
KevJ
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Fri Aug 22, 2014 6:24 pm

Watch without mother
recall Bill and Ben, Trumpton;
childhood memories
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Mon Aug 25, 2014 6:06 pm

Childhood memories
can hold such a huge silence.
Our little secret.
Moth
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Tue Aug 26, 2014 4:23 am

Our little secret
Awkwardly carried by two
One colossal weight
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
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Wed Aug 27, 2014 9:44 pm

One colossal weight
Taken from little closed minds.
No more prejudice.
KevJ
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Fri Aug 29, 2014 5:39 pm

No more prejudice
let us all live and let live
coexist in peace.
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Mon Sep 01, 2014 7:52 am

Coexist in peace
all religions of the world
demonstrate your love
KevJ
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Fri Sep 05, 2014 5:32 pm

demonstrate your love
like an angel from above
faithful to the end
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Fri Sep 05, 2014 9:26 pm

faithful to the end
the spaniel’s gentle whining
his master’s silence
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Sat Sep 06, 2014 8:44 am

his master’s silence.
shellac shards signing the snow
cuneiforms his pain
KevJ
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Sat Sep 06, 2014 10:18 am

Cuneiforms his pain
a broken metatarsal
no football for him
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oranggunung
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Fri Sep 12, 2014 5:46 pm

no football for him
slipped off the bench and out of
the transfer window
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Sat Sep 13, 2014 8:25 am

the transfer window,
locked against the loosened leaves,
lets the late sun in
KevJ
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Sat Sep 13, 2014 9:24 am

Lets the late sun in
and the Indian summer heat
postpones the Autumn
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Sat Sep 13, 2014 12:37 pm

postpones the Autumn,
prorogues the Coronation
until we say 'yes'
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