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Moth
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Mon Sep 15, 2014 2:23 am

until we say 'yes'
opportunity exists
for new proposals
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
KevJ
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Sat Sep 20, 2014 2:42 am

for new proposals
In half lit hotel rooms
some cash changed hands
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
oranggunung
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Sat Sep 20, 2014 2:45 pm

some cash changed hands
possibly some opinions
the rules never change
KevJ
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Sun Sep 21, 2014 2:14 am

The rules never change!
Without the rules there would be
absolute chaos
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
RichardSanders
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Tue Sep 23, 2014 9:35 pm

Absolute chaos
Dogs bark behind blind fences
Sirens in the dark
KevJ
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Fri Sep 26, 2014 6:55 pm

Sirens in the dark!
The Luftwaffe drop their bombs.
Run to the shelter.
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
oranggunung
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Sun Sep 28, 2014 4:26 pm

run to the shelter
and hide, under covers, from
their blanket bombing
KevJ
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Sun Oct 05, 2014 1:39 pm

Or is that carpet
Bombing, the rolling thunder
Falling rains of death
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oranggunung
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Sat Oct 18, 2014 10:48 am

falling rains of death
as October storms the streets
sycamores succumb
k-j
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Sun Oct 19, 2014 6:41 am

Sycamores succumb
to the same imperative
as you, donning jeans.
fine words butter no parsnips
KevJ
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Sat Oct 25, 2014 3:22 am

As you, donning jeans
so I don my hat. We both
look very stylish.
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
k-j
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Sat Oct 25, 2014 4:16 am

"Look. Very stylish
these peacocks are. Let's eat them"
say the Tudors.
fine words butter no parsnips
oranggunung
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Mon Oct 27, 2014 9:25 pm

say the Tudors,
mockers of architecture,
rose to prominence
Moth
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Sat Nov 01, 2014 5:39 pm

rose to prominence,
thorns proving no deterrent,
their side protected
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
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Sun Nov 02, 2014 4:18 pm

their side protected
mail-coat wire foundling pups
stubble on his chin
Marc
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Mon Nov 03, 2014 1:23 pm

Stubble on his chin
like a field of old cut corn
waiting for the burn.
oranggunung
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Tue Nov 04, 2014 11:52 pm

waiting for the burn
after the bubbles abate …
tequila slammers
nar
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Wed Nov 05, 2014 12:34 am

tequila slammers
medicinal Mexican --
with a pinch of salt
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
KevJ
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Fri Nov 07, 2014 8:35 pm

with a pinch of salt
and like everything you say
so much verbal bull!
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Marc
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Wed Nov 12, 2014 1:55 pm

"So much..." Verbal Bull
sighed "...so much grass and never
enough good stud work"
oranggunung
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Sat Nov 15, 2014 10:55 am

“Enough! Good stud work
should not be praised in rugby
internationals.”
Marc
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Tue Nov 18, 2014 11:31 am

Internationals:
playboys and politicians,
surfing on our shit.
KevJ
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Sat Nov 22, 2014 10:58 am

Surfing on our shit
more political bullshite
one more lie to spin
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Marc
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Mon Nov 24, 2014 11:23 am

One more lie to spin;
one more election to win;
one more knife slides in.
Marc
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Fri Nov 28, 2014 3:10 pm

One more blade slides in.
The knife thrower's assistant
takes another breath
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