The Foul and The Silly-Twat

[rantingpete]

The Foul and the Silly-Twat

The Foul and the Silly-Twat went to Spain
On a Boeing 747.
They took some weed, and plenty of speed
And flew off for a hell made in heaven.
The Foul looked up from his plastic cup,
In his hand he was holding a bra,
‘You silly old Twat! This isn’t my hat,
What a silly old Twat you are,
You are,
You are!
What a silly old Twat you are!’

Twat said to Foul, ‘Don’t call me a cow!
You’re tongue’s like a dirty old sewer!
I won’t let you wreck me! So start to respect me:
You’re language is just like manure.’
They landed in Spain, and it started to rain,
Every day for the rest of their time,
They sat in the bar reading yesterdays Star,
And brawled over lager and lime,
And lime,
And lime!
And brawled over lager and lime.

‘Here Waiter, please tell me where someone will sell me
A whore!’ Said the Waiter, ‘I can.’
And he showed him the way, it was not far away
And he watched the old Foul as he ran.
He turned to his wife, who was holding a knife,
Her tears like the Niagara Falls;
If he comes back tonight, he’d better take flight
I’m going to chop off his balls,
His balls,
His balls,
I’m going to chop off his balls.

[Jasper]

Now sum it all up into a limerick and I'll play ball?

[Lovely]

There is I feel some 'false tagging' here. Choose not to tag your vesre or line
if possible at all. It is better to speak from your heart first and then consider what
is or what is not natural from your heart. It is better that way. Very honest.

Nice piece. You have a feel which is very important to us all maybe.

L x

[rantingpete]

It's just a version of Edward Lears 'The Owl and the Pussy-cat'. Nothing more, nothing less, just abit of fun, completely forced.

[arunansu]

Enjoyed the funny element in it. The rhymes were okay. Nice one.

[David]

It's just a version of Edward Lears 'The Owl and the Pussy-cat'. Nothing more, nothing less, just abit of fun, completely forced.

Not sure what you mean by completely forced. You gave yourself a task, and you carried it through. Thrillingly. I liked it a lot.

Cheers

David

[rantingpete]

Thanks David. What I meant by forced, was I let rhyme dictate where the story went. I couldn't seem to get the correct indentations when posting it, I tried but it just aligned everything to the left.

[Suzanne]

Hello rantingpete

Creative play, fun.
I agree with David, you completed the task well.
Enjoyed,
Suzanne

[rantingpete]

Thank you Suzanne. The crazy thing is I posted this on the poets sanctary forum and it was banned and removed due to the word 'foul' which was deemed as 'bathroom-type crudeness'. Can you believe that? 'Twat' was ok even though some people could deem that as a derogatory word for the female genitalia. Even 'chop off his balls' was not deemed as crude. It's a mad world we live in!!