Dead poets?

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JonJonJon
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Wed May 20, 2009 9:04 pm

Do poets ever die?
Can anyone else really feel another's cry?
A word, a line, a verse or more,
Thoughts and meaning unlocked,
unravel,
rhythm and resonance,
reveal all

Is there any universal truth?
Double meaning or half hearted?
Cliché, cliché, flowery crap?
Thrill seekers for the beauty,
of memorable cleverness,
suffer the trap.

A head and hand can talk to those unborn
Poetic eternity, immortality, cultural DNA,
Expression selfless or vanity driven
Shorthand for the lazy novelist,
Addicted to passion,
Unreadable distilled essence of life?
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Wed May 20, 2009 9:33 pm

Griff Rhys Jones on TV made me write this lol.........;-).....frustration in the poem is about my own inability..
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Thu May 21, 2009 2:37 am

That's fine, you!
I'm glad you did it personally... hence I'd not change a single thing of/about either.

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Thu May 21, 2009 5:11 am

I can feel the passion. S1L2 sounds cliched. Sorry.

Specially liked S3.

Enjoyed.
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Thu May 21, 2009 10:23 am

Passion is all here really and it's a nice express mate.

"Is there any universal truth, double meaning or half hearted" you said.

Yes. It is found within You really though. Poetry is a form of meditation no matter what the
topic chosen. A piece of dust can change into gold with the power of imagination.

Enjoyed much.

L x
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Thu May 21, 2009 5:32 pm

I saw some of that programme, Jon. It looked quite good, but - to my shame - I turned back to The Apprentice. I think you've done a good job with your subject here.

Cheers

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Thu May 21, 2009 7:11 pm

Just finished watching the re-run a very good poem Jon and good to see the program provoked this response, lets hope it has a similar response on more people. But it is a good response thank you for sharing it with us :)
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Fri May 22, 2009 5:27 pm

Thank you all, appreciate the comments. I watched the show and thought it's better to participate than to just watch so wrote this in a burst at the end of the programme so most definitely unpolished...;-)
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