Covered

[Summersky]

Papa's garden hat
hangs quietly on the hook,
his damp spade soiled.

[Cooper]

hello. it's nice, but can a spade get damp? or soiled.

[BenJohnson]

hello. it's nice, but can a spade get damp? or soiled.

After digging through 4 foot of damp clay today the answer is yes. I like the word soiled, it has a great double meaning in this context. The only word that feels wrong to me is 'quietly', I imagine most garden hats are silent, would 'untouched' still fit the meaning?

This is a soft air of sadness about these things, a feeling of things deserted, left behind.

[David]

hello. it's nice, but can a spade get damp? or soiled.

After digging through 4 foot of damp clay today the answer is yes.

I absolutely agree, on all counts. Very nice.

Any haiku (or senyru, or whatever) fascists out there, who want to say it isn't 17 syllables? I don't care.

Cheers

David

[Travis]

Agree on "soiled", a great double meaning.

I have no issue with "quietly" though. I think it works.

Nice one. Nothing to pick on.

[arunansu]

Very evocative, Summersky. Liked every syllable. Smiles.

[BenJohnson]

Any haiku (or senyru, or whatever) fascists out there, who want to say it isn't 17 syllables? I don't care.

David

Hopefully not, when something works as well as this, it proves there is no need for strict syllable counts.

I have no issue with "quietly" though. I think it works.

I shall go down quietly and stop being picky.

[Lake]

Well written Haiku, Summersky. It has that wabi-sabi feel to it.

Lake

[Lovely]

I liked it but to short for me again to write such short works needs impact I failed to see her here.

Liked the coming dawn though however misconstrued.

Lx