Poetry Forum

New to the forum, this is my first attempt at a more modern contemporary type of poem.

Listen! Can you hear?
The whispering words,
And memories to save,
In the Poets Grave,
Buried in time.

Poetic verses,
Imaginary words,
Decaying poetic lines,
Buried in time.

Subjective feelings,
Heavenly dreams,
Thoughts in rhyme,
Buried in time.

Poetry spoken,
In hidden depths,
A legacy sublime,
Buried in time.

Thanks for this very much.

Emotions run deep here but have you read any Masters? Each word
steps into another sublimity. It's the way they tell 'em you know.

I found this very heartfelt indeed. Reminds me of Steve Winwood
bless him, 'the prescense of the Lord' plus Clapton and the riffs taking
off, into sublimity as ever they do.

Needs I feel that bit of (innerness) and depth to score it off..............

thanks

lx

Good idea to take PG as the theme of your first stab at this kind of writing and you develop the theme well.

How contemporary are you willing to be - no rhyme at all, no capitals at the beginning of the lines? Go on - I dare you.

Best,

elph

Wow! I like S2 and S3 the most. Enjoyed the cadence.

"Poetry spoken,
In hidden depths,
A legacy sublime"
- so it is!

Elphin wrote:Good idea to take PG as the theme of your first stab at this kind of writing and you develop the theme well.

How contemporary are you willing to be - no rhyme at all, no capitals at the beginning of the lines? Go on - I dare you.

Best,

elph

Thanks for all the compliments!!!! Trust you elph to dare me! I normally can't resist a challenge, so it looks like I'm going to have to get my brain working and at my age it's not easy!
It may take me a while to come up with something, a suitable subject!! Hmmm now you've got me thinking?