Safari

[arunansu]

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in her eyes
Serengeti grasslands
and a lone giraffe

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she watches me--
the lioness licks her cubs
under umbrella acacia

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weird tune on her lips--
the Masai Chief
inspects his spears

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red-clad tribesmen
perform ‘adumu’--
she sways to their rhythm

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along with wildebeests
and zebras
she migrates

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[manfriday]

Really evocative images. I'm wondering who the feminine figure is though? The way I read it, you've used the Kenyan bush as a backdrop to a romance? You've managed to instil a fair bit of pain in the poem, with great subtlety. Really enjoyable. Perhaps the final stanza could do with a touch-up. Wild beasts is ambiguous and could include zebras. How about using wildebeests? Sounds the same, and they migrate with the zebra...

Nice one.

[arunansu]

Yeah, it would be 'wildebeests'. Sorry for the spelling mistake. I would have titled this "Basic Instinct"! Yes there is an intention to use romance as a backdrop. Thanks.

[manfriday]

ah, sorry, it should be 'wildebeest', the plural and singular are the same, just as in zebra.

[arunansu]

Manfriday,

I searched the Net, and found:

It is a countable noun, thus it's safe to say Zebras as the plural of Zebra.Also plural of wildebeest can be wildebeest, wildebeests or wildebai. Smiles.

[Lovely]

It's hard to keep up with you you must be doing poems every minute of the day.

Wow we must take a stroll together one of these days here; or in the Higher Rings.


Lx

[arunansu]

Thank you for your reply, Lovely. My poems are short usually, so they do not require much time to get written, perhaps. BTW, what is "Higher Rings"?
Smiles.

[Lovely]

Nice thoughts and true in so many ways.