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Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 6:22 am
by Suzanne
Lonesome but stubborn
The threshold you've crossed
will never be offered
to another pair of boots.
Behind my closed door,
I choose to not dance
with a partner until you return.
No one compares to you in your dancing shoes.
.
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 9:58 am
by arunansu
Thanks for the Sevenling, Suzanne. I CAN RELATE!!
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 3:09 pm
by Patrick92
really good the way u packed so much emotion into 7 lines is fantastic!
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 4:19 pm
by David
Nice sevenling, and especially a nice sevener.
Cheers
David
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 5:36 pm
by Danté
Suzanne
Well conveyed and good choice of imagery used to depict the exlusive nature of your content.
I too, liked the neat form and symmetry.
Tim
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Mon Jul 27, 2009 8:41 pm
by smiffey
Hi Suzanne,
Neat, compact and rich - plus I've learnt new form. I'd never heard of Severnlings (mind you I haven't heard of a lot of things).
Thanks for the read & I admire your ability to condense an image so well.
Cheers
Smiffey
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Tue Jul 28, 2009 1:44 pm
by Lovely
Wow again.
Nice touch, it went inside of me.
I'd love it !
lx
Re: Lonesome but stubborn
Posted: Sat Aug 08, 2009 5:29 pm
by Suzanne
I have been away on holiday but wanted to say...
Thank you for the nice responses to this sevenling, which I had never heard of before.
Thank you, Aru! you are a master of the short forms. I will add this one to my list.
I really appreciated the feedback.
Suzanne