A School Report.

[Petronius]

I think of a bowed blonde head,
bright in the dusty sunlight.
What future lies in those inky fingers
which curl and concentrate round her pen?
Is it important if she finds a gerund
and a gerundive confusing?
Promise of beauty is itself a talent;
sonnets are made for people; love is reciprocal
and Petrarch wanted Laura ambiguously.
Besides, what can one, wishing for grace himself,
faithfully write about another child?
So leaving as always, time to extrapolate,
I consider the limited present possibilities,
and with perfect truth write:
"Fair."

[ray miller]

Great poem! Has a wonderful line:sonnets are made for people; love is reciprocal. I do wonder if a promise of beauty is a talent, though, or are you being ironic?

I thought "So, leaving as always, time to extrapolate..." could have been better put.Comma after leaving rather than so? The ending is very fine.

[Petronius]

Quite right. Thank you. I have altered it.

[arunansu]

"sonnets are made for people; love is reciprocal"
- The line stands out, specially with the reference to Patriach (I haven't read him, though) and Laura. Wonderful write. Enjoyed.

[mesmie]

Oh how I enjoyed this..the idea is wonderful..what a great ending too..

nice one
mes

[Lovely]

Your rays of light shine bright here.

It has that simple tital yet is rich in content and thought.

Loved...... I would keep Her.

lxxx

[David]

I agree. Very good, and even less of a beginner's poem. Step up to the plate, Signor P.

[Arian]

I found this poignant and lyrical. I wasn't sure I took a clear meaning from lines 7-9, but it doesn't ruin the poem. In fact, for me, it adds an element of mystery to an otherwise very clear reflection on the hipocrisy of judgement. Or, anyway, that's how I interpreted it.

I can't suggest any obvious improvements. So thanks for the read!

[Susan-Morris3]

well just called by to have a read I'm baffled by your poem, but I am tired been a long day so will re read maybe i will get it in the end ?