Poetry Forum

Thank you for this my springtime,
the return of all my swallows,
my frozen stream's breaking.

Thank you for this new pain,
waking again my dead life,
my winter world's ending.

Thank you for being as you are,
should ever winter return,
a spring day for remembering.

What lovely words, what lovely thoughts.

What a lovely poem She Is.

lxxxx

Simple, lyrical, nice. No new ground, obviously, but some very pleasing old ground.

Should you really be posting in Beginners? I don't think it would be a big step up to Experienced for you.

thank you for reminding us of spring. this is a beautiful feeling. paisley

I can't sensibly add to the comments already made - only agree with them.
Charming words.

Hi Petronious.

Gratitude for a re-awakening so very gracefully expressed, without being gushy - much dignity and music in this.
The title worked - piqued my interest immediately: I was curious to know what the thanks were going to be given for.

The structure supports your content. There is a power in the threes, three 'thank yous', three three-line stanzas. The 'ing' endings of the final words of the final line of each stanza both helps knit the poem together and creates a lovely music. The poem sings.

Mic, thanking you, three times at the very least.

liked your thank you poem, gave me a lovely spring feeling x

Thank you for your comments on my poem. I like writing lyric poetry altough it is sadly out of fashion.

I envy your natrual talent. Nuff said. Thanks.

I really like this, especially the idea that it all belongs to you.

My one quibblette is
"wakening again my dead life"
IMHO this would be better as
"reawakening my dead life"

GeoffI