aspirations

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mummybear7
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Sat Aug 22, 2009 8:31 am

I aspire to be taller,
richer and brighter.

To be fabulous both
day and at night.

To turn heads wherever I wander,
and always to be completely right.

But, I am shorter,
poorer and thicker,

both in my head
and around my waist,

and my prowess
seems to desert me,

and I suspect
I have quite questionable taste!
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Sat Aug 22, 2009 3:12 pm

Very nicely written, and I like the twist at the end. :wink:
Enjoyed.
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Mon Aug 24, 2009 1:28 pm

A beauty.

May you always know light and kindness you are so attuned........



xx
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Mon Aug 24, 2009 5:32 pm

Hey, mb7.

I love reading pieces where I can image the author writing them, and pondering over each line.

This is such a piece. Made me smile. :)

Cheers,

- Neil.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Aug 28, 2009 7:12 pm

It is a nice one.
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Sat Aug 29, 2009 1:38 pm

It is stated very well. These are common thoughts, for sure!
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Sat Aug 29, 2009 11:28 pm

Liked this poem, thoughts many of us have i think.x :wink:
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