Moonlight Prana ( some things I've changed here)

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Sat Sep 05, 2009 3:06 pm

This flood of pouring rain is life-force with a name
the trees are lungs for us
these rivers, deep her blood,

this earth all we have,
this body must be glad,
the life-force through veins
are lightning bolts blue its name,

our fingertips, these lights,
they brighten up the stars,
to serve and help all souls.......
the way home is far,

the movement of my tongue
vibrations--------- all is One,
this breath I deeply breathe
these waves of light and sea,

one must help------ we must,
our sailing boats adjust,
a million years to spell
in this heaven or hell,

below until above
still waiting for my love,
my heart it will not rest
till love is manifest,

deep within my soul
the Cosmic-Conscience is Whole!
This, a truth to see,
the only spark ever left in me,

In moonlight, there's a spell....
to roam in heaven or hell. Wow.
The poet must adjust
to find his deeper love,

this prana is all Life
it cuts one like a knife,
what we need to ask
of our deep and loving past,

love's eternal youth
the moon-doors we walk through,
one leads to hell
the other I won't spell,

it's for us to find, love in Higher Minds.
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Sun Sep 06, 2009 1:24 pm

I can feel the calmness of moonlight in this piece, Lovely. I love how you used the word 'Prana'. The title is just in sync with the theme! About the rhymes, you know better! :D
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Mon Sep 07, 2009 1:22 pm

Thanks Aru. I just wanted to give some energy with it, however I feel it is by no means
polished........thanks again though.

I know this is off the subject but i've just been listening to KIngs Of Leon again "sex on fire" and it seems
to fit in with this song..........that's weird.......same pacy beat..it's not a song though.
I think it needs polishing when I get more time I promise I will try and do it proper.

LOL
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Mon Sep 07, 2009 2:15 pm

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HHhhcKxflMY

KIngs Of Leon


This number for them "2sex on fire" which is weird.......... they
changed it to "sex on fire" still like it though.. my (persona) is a secret sorry.


They were stuck in a rut as it were, can you write something for us then lovely,

no way I said, but then I caved in......... enjoy it if you want to xxxxxxx

They didn't hold me down guys--- only images here, do love the bass guitarist
though, he's a nice bloke man.......





l x
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Mon Sep 07, 2009 3:43 pm

"those eyes (so) black and wide".....slight edit... from 'those eyes black and wide'.

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Mon Sep 07, 2009 4:21 pm

This is scaring the s... out of me. I'm writing numbers for groups all the time
but since i've ringed with you I'm getting scared when can we stop and this loving
or should we love and love until we die?.........that's nice.


forever love you always...your sex is is on fire.......but feel really scared, really.

I don't know to how to call it now or something else or a "ting " still missing her spell...

loads of love you deeply well still scared for this thing........I love you guys but
I just don't know...........so ever from me i will weigh her up to and sex on fire

love those guys it has that kicking melody ........I so love

l xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Mon Sep 07, 2009 9:43 pm

Need to delete this.....sorry
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Wed Sep 09, 2009 11:31 am

Tinkered again with her....I'll leave her now to rest.........
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Wed Sep 09, 2009 11:41 am

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=alJ87WnQ5XA ........for you guys it's a song I so
much love.. "from the film, "Up In Smoke" .. I do love chong

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Wed Sep 09, 2009 1:01 pm

The reason why I did not put original draft here is because I'm twisting the verbs here

It helps me loads.......will always be writing songs for souls though........
please understand.


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Wed Sep 09, 2009 6:41 pm

Phew. 10 posts, of which 9 are yours, L. That must be some sort of record.

This is another breath from your cosmic consciousness.

Hope all's well.

Cheers

David
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Wed Sep 09, 2009 8:24 pm

Loads of love always David. Power and love to you dear friend and your Beautiful
Soul deeply ever your rivers I love........really so David.

I am with you and love you. Dave you have that feel, which is a veil,
which Isis has worn so well for thousands of my tears.

I still like "Chong" though David.....reminds me of You.

What is wrong with nine, David? There are 12 planets
the one between Jupiter and mars was smashed to bits
it was known as (Lucifer( David, so much for 'cosmic awareness' eh?

The history of our solar system is truly vast ...would you like to know
David? About (12 planets) not nine........and why our cosmos is so?

All the human beings I meet sadly shy away from these questions
they have been to Oxford and have learned Nothing in Wisdom.

Quite sad really, I feel so ever sorry for them David.


About the smashing of the (planet Lucifer) would any one
like to know for truth is really a kill

I leave it to you all, I guess, though no one likes the truth do they?












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Wed Sep 09, 2009 10:21 pm

I edit as I go along as time is difficult; but I try the best .
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Thu Sep 10, 2009 5:14 pm

I've tried to watch those videos - the first one I get "This video is not available in your country due to copyright restrictions" (the swine!), but I quite like the Cheech and Chong one. Which one is Chong?

Nine is just fine.
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Thu Sep 10, 2009 5:30 pm

Go on then, tell us about Lucifer. But surely any extra planets were destroyed long before mankind came along to name them? Or am i being too literal? :D
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Thu Sep 10, 2009 9:12 pm

The Handsome one David, that's you. He's on the right side.

Ros, give me some time, will talk about "Lucifer" and its smashing, 'and why' it
was (destroyed) Ros, you won't believe it....





LOL xx
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Thu Sep 10, 2009 11:15 pm

wawww.... :wink: never mind" Ross" i wana know now ! What wont we believe lovely ? x
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Fri Sep 11, 2009 10:50 am

Lovely,

I am checking in just to say that I have read the thread....
have not had time for the videos but will get to it later.

Lovely, you add interesting colours to this place.

Suzanne
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