Flooded village

[arunansu]

poems stranded
in knee-deep water; moon-smile
distorted on ripples

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flying machine drops
relief-packets on terrace
crows wrangle

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ten thousand dead, over
ten thousand missing: their graves
inside my poem-book

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[ Solo Renhai version ]

poems stranded
in knee-deep water; moon-smile
distorted on ripples


flying machine drops relief -
a mud hut collapses

ten thousand dead, over
ten thousand missing: their graves
inside a poem-book

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[Renhai Minimum Definition:
1. Three independent haiku (formatted as 3-lines, 2-lines, 3-lines).

2. Each haiku (verse) links uniquely to the other two verses in some way.

3. Each verse references at least one common theme.

4. A seasonal reference (kigo) is desired. If there is a season then only one season is referenced by at least one verse. If there is no kigo then the renhai should be nature-based and would be considered "Non-seasonal" or "All season".

5. There is an appropriate title.

Renhai is generally a collaboration between two poets. This is a Solo Renhai.Smiles.]

[backinblack]

Nice visuals as always, good to read you again.

BinB.

[jms]

Excellent, as always. If I had to quibble, 'flying-machine' felt awkward in the second one...

Jon

[Lake]

Good imagery as always. I'm with Jon on "flying machine". I picture it as airplane unless there's something other than that.

If you continue this pattern, say, 3 lines/2lines/3lines/2lines..., it is a renga, is it? Except that renga is written by more than one person.

Cheers,

Lake

[arunansu]

Thanks BinB, Jms and Lake. I used "flying machine" to give an ancient feel to the ordinary "helicopter". Flying machine brings to my mind the earlier / primitive models of aircrafts. Somehow the primitiveness connected with the age-old floods, an 'original sin' of Nature. Just played with it.
Need to know more about Renga to comment. Smiles. Thanks, everyone.

[Lovely]

Sumatra Aru. I am so sorry Aru.

Pray: and send the love Aru, we all need to do, and let us have quick response
in this anger of nature, Aru.

x

[arunansu]

Thanks for your thoughts on this, Lovely. Smiles.

[tool]

The beauty of form
The council within the poem
Is so manifestly small
That its speaks volumes
tool

[arunansu]

Thank you for the reply,Tool.