Poetry Forum

Inside a bookstore, a humble bee
consumes one bare afternoon

it whizzes, tastes the rinds of poetry books,
neatly arranged in rows

**

In a flower shop, I spend the evening
with garden-fresh chrysanthemums,

magnolias, lantana, daffodils and some
tell-me-my-name florets; my endless

woolgathering envisions an Ikebana
with a hummingbird glued to silence

**

[Ikebana : http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ikebana]

HI Arun,
lovely piece, simple and direct. Loved the first and last stanzas, they evoke a vivid mental image, especially the ikebana display with a hummingbird attached, wonderful!
The only thing I'm not sure about is,
'it whizzes, tastes the rinds of poem
books, neatly arranged in rows' this jumps a bit to me, putting 'books' on the next line is a little jarring. Other than that, really good.

Kimi

Thanks Kimibob for spending your time here, and thank you so much for the help. Edited.

you must be a very interesting bee.

beautiful poem again

Thank you Tool for your time on this and replying.

It don't half roll this......." it whizzes, taste the rinds of poet books" what a line.

I'll hold myself back here less I write an ode to her

best

Thank you Lovely for saying that. Smiles.

Aru,

The first four lines are enchanting all by themselves. I like the images and have recently been in a small book shop, so could envision it very well.
I don't know why but "poem books" doesn't flow very well with me. I know that I would never say poem books, I would say poetry books or books of poems, or leave off books and just say poems.

Very nice and, yes, educational. You are so interesting.

Suzanne

Thank you Suzanne, I like the half-rhyme of "poetry" with "neatly". Thanks for the nit-picking.
Smiles.