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artificial hibernation
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 8:56 pm
by wildmountainthyme
Droperidol, it cures it all,
when you are HIGH
it makes you small,
if you are worried, or talk too much
Droperidol comes after lunch,
it let's us move you,
from chair to chair,
and keeps you out of nursings hair,
it soothes and smoothes and is well used
it calms desire and quenches fire,
it cools your brain and eases pain
it gives us rest, when you're a pest,
Droperidol will set you free,
but best of all?
it let's us sit and watch T.V.
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 10:27 pm
by ray miller
Nice one, written from the heart, by the sound of things.You might want to consider: "it cures all", lose an it."if you are stressed" rather than worried, helps rhythmically, I think.
nurses' hair?
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 11:35 pm
by twoleftfeet
And there's me thinking that drugs are there for the patient's benefit..
Just kidding. You've confirmed something that I've always suspected. Zombies are easier to police.
I think Nursings should be Nursing's if by that you mean the department, but Ray's suggestion is better IMHO.
Nice one, WMT
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 10:53 am
by Dalena
I enjoyed this and think your title is well chosen. The closing line made me smile.
The subject is handled well and seems authoritative which makes the poem more interesting for me,
as it's a subject I know little of, but I gained some insight here.
Thanx
Dalena
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 9:25 pm
by wildmountainthyme
thanks for comments. i work in this field, i love it and hate it, mostly love it.
dan
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Tue Dec 22, 2009 1:39 am
by Lovely
Well done!
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Tue Dec 22, 2009 6:31 am
by arunansu
Enjoyed the poem, Wildmountainthyme. I like the way you have handled the rhyme. Nothing else to add. Smiles.
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Tue Dec 22, 2009 8:21 pm
by anniecat
wildmountainthyme wrote:Droperidol, it cures it all,
when you are HIGH
it makes you small,
if you are worried, or talk too much
Droperidol comes after lunch,
it let's us move you,
from chair to chair,
and keeps you out of nurses hair, ....................nurses
it soothes and smoothes and is well used
it calms desire and quenches fire,
it cools your brain and eases pain
it gives us rest, when you're a pest,
Droperidol will set you free,
but best of all?
it let's us sit and watch T.V.
Liked it and very true, i know of people who have been on the drug, Bart Simpson for one
Re: artificial hibernation
Posted: Tue Dec 22, 2009 10:09 pm
by Lake
You write about your work place well, wildmountainthyme. I feel a bit sadness in your easy and smooth words.
Best,
Lake