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Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 6:05 am
by arunansu
[ Tanka Sequence ]
calendar pages
unsettled by breeze
a new year
sparrows engaged
in what-if analysis
Endymion
looks out for Cynthia
between clouds
i open my window
a sparrow escapes
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Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Sun Dec 27, 2009 11:49 am
by GONE AWAY
It was different, however I liked it, thankyou.
All the best
Ian.
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Sun Dec 27, 2009 2:10 pm
by arunansu
Thank you Ian for the reply and time.
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Mon Dec 28, 2009 6:44 pm
by mbc
I love the image of the calender pages unsettled by the breeze and the hint of disquiet within the room. One sparrow escapes through the window, eh? Lucky her/him. Lost me on Endymion. Any clues?
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 4:42 am
by arunansu
Thanks for visiting, Mbc. "Endymion" is a poem written by John Keats (panned by critics too). You can find it here:
http://www.john-keats.com/
Smiles.
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 11:12 am
by Lovely
That is brilliant Aru!
You don't know how good You are... do you?
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 11:31 am
by mbc
Thanks for the link to Keats. Really enjoyed both his and yours.
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 12:07 pm
by David
I like the "sparrows engaged / in what-if analysis", aru.
Cheers
David
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 1:02 pm
by Arian
As often happens with your work, aru, I didn't quite connect with any meaning you might have intended, but I liked the sound of it - I particularly like the image in the first 2 lines.
cheers
peter
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 5:04 am
by arunansu
Thank you Lovely, Mbc, David. Sorry Arian, that this didn't work for you.
Smiles.
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 6:43 am
by k-j
Lovely wrote:That is brilliant Aru!
You don't know how good You are... do you?
I agree. You're extremely good at recording things - everyday occurrences - in haiku-style verse. There's always a dash of colour or scent or something to grab onto, and you're so good at describing movement. And I can compliment you as much as I like because I know you'll just carry on doing what you do.
Re: Of roving thoughts, and a bit of Keats
Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 8:37 am
by arunansu
Thanks K-j for the appreciation of the piece. I invite you to visit my new blogsite :
www.arunansub.blogspot.com
Smiles.