Poetry Forum

Don't cast your love on me
i'm not worth it, don't you see
shallow person me.

shallow you?
Never thought I'd become
shallower

Very nice vignette, Anniecat. Great play of emotions here.

Thank you Arun, i'm just messing about again...........i think

Annie,
wot ya doing?
It should read.

Pour your love on me.
I'm worth it, don't you see.
You are nothing without me.

There we go.

Ha ha you funny......but so true

Yes, it's true Annie.
Lol.

Ah, don't go running yourself down, Annie. There's always plenty of other people that are happy to do that for you.

This is maybe a bit short. Could you big it up a bit? And while you're about it, big yourself up a bit as well.

Cheers

David

Smiles guys

Hello anniecat,

My first post, so I'll try and be useful!

I like the shortness of your poem, I symbolises the shallowness you speak of. But this is aesthetic, if you look at the emotion in the poem it's not. There is self-examination. And the 'shallow person me' sounds kind of childish- but in a poetic way.
I noticed that you included the word 'cast' in your poem. Does this mean you are infatuated by this person but don't feel good enough? Maybe infatuation evokes those sorts of feelings, because love may not be recipricated.
Also are you spiritual? The word 'cast' is really standing out to me!

Hello Elf and welcome, thanks for reading this, cast means throw...so don't throw your love on me.

"Wherever I Lay My Hat (That's My Home)"

That's what I've been thinking of.

By the look in your eye I can tell you're gonna cry.
Is it over me?
If it is, save your tears
for I'm not worth it, you see.

Ha ha i bought his album, back in the day, loved that song...lol
Have you read my not a ryhme.....transition?

while all are grasping these moments of spring you speak of sadness here and hurt.
Well let me say I understand if I may. Take it from me I cry every day.

I like this honesty

Awww!! honesty..speak out and be free i say......