When I first saw you ...

[arunansu]

When I saw you,
autumn had ripened.

Two ogres
in a cavern
appeared perplexed.
One was mourning
for a dying season,
the other was busy
preparing for winter.

When you called me,
asked for the route to the city,
a sudden breeze rushed through golden canopies.

Your voice resounded off nearby mountains-
the ogres fell silent.

[Lovely]

what an imagination you have Aru. One praying the other seeing yes?

Enimatical and hidden the meaning but nevertheless true.

Not for the average poet I feel.

Nicely expressed

thankyou

[arunansu]

Yes, like two sides of the coin, one 'head', one 'tail',ha ha! Either you win, or you lose, and ....'the Winner takes it all'! Thanks, Lovely.

[anniecat]

I liked this Arun, i couldn't work it out at first, with Lovelys input i understood...very good

[arunansu]

Thank you Annie for being here and replying. Smiles.

[leylarose]

I don't have any constructive criticism to share
but
I keep coming back to this poem.
I really like it,
so (in place of any useful information)
I thought I'd let you know.
= )

[arunansu]

Thanks Leylarose. Glad that you have liked it. Smiles.