I plunged down
the depths of quietude,
you relished the way
the mirror crashed to the floor.
That day I could discern
craters of ivory moon.
I'm no longer the poet
who'd fumble with words;
the mist has cleared
And each bend in the path
guides me towards brightness.
Dawning
Last edited by arunansu on Sun Aug 08, 2010 4:44 am, edited 1 time in total.
Aru, I liked the optimism of this piece and found it rather poignant without fully understanding why.
The word placements are making this read very well.
thanks
Tim
The word placements are making this read very well.
thanks
Tim
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
Thank you Tim for your comments and time. Smiles.
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Well written as always, though I'm not quite sure I understand it, but I would like to know the meaning behind it. I particularly like "That day I could discern craters of ivory moon".
I think it has a great ending too, is that supposed to represent difficulties in life guiding people to make better choices?
I think it has a great ending too, is that supposed to represent difficulties in life guiding people to make better choices?