beautiful once

[Mr Black]

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[ray miller]

Not another West Ham fan! Jesus!
trench bound is good. Are you referring to the dug-out where so many English players now find themselves warming the benches? No mention of mobile phones? Interesting.

[rantingpete]

Some truly 'laugh out loud' moments here. It definitely worked for me. And bittersweet of course...

Pete

[David]

trench bound is good.

It is? Damn. I don't get it.

[Lake]

It must be targeted to a certain audiance.

[Arian]

trench bound is good.

It is? Damn. I don't get it.

Nor me, I'm afraid. I must be as obtuse as David. Probably more so.
Just as a matter of interest, do you consider reference to bodily functions a necessary element of good poetry? They seem to feature pretty highly in the pieces of yours I've just read. Not a criticism, far less a judgement, just intrigued.

cheers
peter

[John G]

Short - relatively sweet.

I would suggest the first bit read:

i

was beautiful once
i swear
i could dance


now
bench bound

The dance reference works for me, players with big side burns and twinkle toes, dancing acorss the field , but I’m not to fond of the singing bit.

Im assuming the trench is a refenrec to the old skool dug outs, as opposed to these new fangled comfy airplane seats they seem to sit upon.

Could really just end it there. The title helps with the minimal approach - helps sum the whole thing up.

As for Peters question of bodily functions, my lips are sealed!!

[Mr Black]

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[Meesha]

It makes sense if I consider english football to mean either Rugby Union or Rugby League.
But then we call your football soccer over yonder.

M

[David]

Thanks for the comments. This was supposed to be a lament to the lack of what use to be euphemistically called flair players, the likes of Frank Worthington, Tony Currie etc. and the advent of the footballer/athlete.

And amen to that. Nigel De Jong! I ask you.

But, Mr. B, what's the trench?

Cheers

David

[Mr Black]

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[KevJ]

Well I enjoyed the humor here. Frank Worhington, I remember him well (are we giving our ages away) He of course played for the other Birmingham side but I don't hold that against him.