Just for fun.
There’s Really Nothing To It
I found a piece of nothing in my back yard yesterday.
I’d planned to mow the lawn so tried to move the piece away.
I thought to get behind it, backing off and sneaking round.
But it sensed my every movement and steadfastly held its ground.
Nothing made me angry. Nothing made me swear.
Nothing made me quite so mad as seeing nothing there.
Finally I called my wife. “I need your help.” I said.
There’s nothing on the lawn and Darl, it’s doing in my head.”
She said “I’m seeing nothing. You’ll have to show me where.”
Despairingly I turned and shouted “Look! There’s nothing there.”
“Exactly!” spoke my wife “And so it seems we both agree.
and now if I don’t hurry you’ll get nothing for your tea.”
I put away the mower and I locked the tool shed door.
“Aah well!” I thought, “At my age nothing matters any more.”
I went inside, switched on the box, still feeling all at sea.
My wife called out “Good luck darl, you’ll find nothing on TV.
Wazza
There's Really Nothing To It
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Hello Wazza.
I loved the idea here, and found the rhyme and meter went well with the exception of the first line of the last verse. "I put away the mower and (I?) locked the toolshed door." I don't know. It's just that the rhythm was going so well until I stumbled on that line. I know we're usually advised to remove stock from our work more often than not but, to me, if a poem is written with meter in mind, then it should do so in its entirety.
A very enjoyable read. Thank you.
Mick.
I loved the idea here, and found the rhyme and meter went well with the exception of the first line of the last verse. "I put away the mower and (I?) locked the toolshed door." I don't know. It's just that the rhythm was going so well until I stumbled on that line. I know we're usually advised to remove stock from our work more often than not but, to me, if a poem is written with meter in mind, then it should do so in its entirety.
A very enjoyable read. Thank you.
Mick.
Just because you're paranoid it doesn't mean they're not out to get you.
Mick you are absolutely correct. Metre is everything in rhyming verse. Thanks for the observation. I have edited the poem. Isn't it funny how one can read something a hundred times and then another reader can pick up an error in one read.
I guess that's why publishers employ proof readers.
Thanks again.
Wazza
I guess that's why publishers employ proof readers.
Thanks again.
Wazza