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Politics.
Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2015 3:09 pm
by Gbn
A quick missive..
Let's all stand up and right the wrongs, put the world to right
Sit and talk of genocide and all that other shite
A united voice that gives us choice to right the wrongs that matter
No! What we really need to do is stand up to Sepp Blatter.
Re: Politics.
Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2015 5:08 pm
by David
It's a good point, Gb. Frankie Boyle made a very similar point in the Guardian this week -
http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfre ... l-thatcher ... perhaps Sepp Blatter is just a monstrous panto distraction from the really important stuff.
Re: Politics.
Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2015 5:58 pm
by ray miller
Yes, agreed. The important thing about Blatter is that he's foreign. There's a belief in this country that bribery and corruption is something others do - despite all the evidence to the contrary.
For a 4 line poem there's a lot of repetition - right the wrongs, world to rights, right the wrongs(again).
Re: Politics.
Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2015 6:11 pm
by Gbn
Let's all stand up and put the world right
Sit and talk of genocide and all that other shite
A united voice that gives us choice to change the things that matter
No! What we really need to do is stand up to Sepp Blatter.
Thanks for comments, was a bit of a knee jerk reaction, think above reads better..?
Re: Politics.
Posted: Wed Jun 17, 2015 12:55 pm
by cynwulf
yes it's better , gets the point over without the verbal clutter of the original. An appropriate comment on the relative blather of important and much less important we experience nowadays.
regards, c.
Re: Politics.
Posted: Wed Jun 17, 2015 1:14 pm
by brianedwards
I'm not usually squeamish, or sensitive to such things, but lumping genocide in with "all that other shite", in a poem about corruption in sports administration, just seems very very wrong.
B.
Re: Politics.
Posted: Wed Jun 17, 2015 2:02 pm
by Moth
Agree with the above, also I feel the poem would be made stronger by adding other examples, no shortage of 'ight' rhymes.
Re: Politics.
Posted: Mon Jun 22, 2015 8:07 pm
by EatMyPoetry
brianedwards wrote:I'm not usually squeamish, or sensitive to such things, but lumping genocide in with "all that other shite", in a poem about corruption in sports administration, just seems very very wrong.
B.
I agree with you but this line highlights that more people wish to talk about Blatter than genocide, unfortunately.