Dicks and Drake

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NotQuiteSure
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Dicks and Drake
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Nazis in Rowboats


He's comandeered
a pedallo
and bellows
at the refugees
a wanna be
who wants the world
to know this
"is a tolerant country".

A captain for the cameras
decks awash with pride
a Cnut who doesn't understand
you cannot turn a tide

and this isn't an invasion
but another f**king lie.


and that isn't an invasion
it's the body of a child.


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Thu Aug 20, 2020 10:48 am

I like the intensity of this one (and the cussing :)
But I'm not sure of the subject.
How does the misandry over Drakes schlong relate to Breivik style xenophobia?
I'm missing a piece of the puzzle, I need a clue.
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Thu Aug 20, 2020 11:26 am

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Hi Amadis.

The title is a play on Ducks and Drakes (a pastime, also, to squander, to waste) with nods to Sir Francis Drake
(being something of a 'national hero') and dicks (being ... well, dicks).

https://www.independent.co.uk/news/uk/politics/nigel-farage-kent-beach-invasion-video-anti-migrant-immigration-a9658246.html

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Sat Aug 22, 2020 12:09 am

So the code is: Dicks==Dicks
I truly overthought that one.
LOL :)

I like the new ending, I think it more powerful.
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Sun Aug 23, 2020 12:11 am

Really enjoyed, punchy clever and topical. The ending hits home.
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Amadis wrote:
Sat Aug 22, 2020 12:09 am
I like the new ending, I think it more powerful.
Thanks Amadis.

Hi Charles,
thanks for the read, glad you enjoyed it.


Regards both, Not


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