He dreams of castles (rev. 2)

[jisbell00]

Hi FLiss,

I rather like "rounded." Flaxen I'm unsure about - were you troubled that long was followed by showing it was long? And I don't see your new title, but then I am new to all this!

Cheers,
John

[Macavity]

Thumbs up on the new title Fliss!

best

Phil

[Leaf]

Hi FLiss,

I rather like "rounded." Flaxen I'm unsure about - were you troubled that long was followed by showing it was long? And I don't see your new title, but then I am new to all this!

Cheers,
John

Hi John,

Thank you! Yes, I thought the tell-then-show might be a bit much. I'm still thinking about alternatives here.

The new title is displayed as the thread title: 'He dreams of castles'

Bw,
Fliss

[Leaf]

Thumbs up on the new title Fliss!

best

Phil

Hooray! Thanks, Phil

Bw,
Fliss

[jisbell00]

Thanks, Fliss - how silly of me! I like the new title too.

Cheers,
John

[Leaf]

You're welcome, John; I'm glad you like the new title

I'm still thinking about the hair description, by the way. Do you think 'fine fair hair' would be okay? I'm not sure whether or not that messes up the meter

Bw,
Fliss

[jisbell00]

Hi FLiss,

I think fine fair hair is quite nice. Tennyson said he knew the scansion of every English word except scissors.

Cheers,
John

[Leaf]

Thanks, John

I've made that change! It's ready now, I think.

Bw,
Fliss