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come to mourn the dead
springs bloom infused with souls yearn
dried seeds float in space
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dried seeds float in space
a happy happenstance for
our shaman's story
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Our shaman's story
analog not digital
undissected dreams.
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undissected dreams
he pours into waking hours
and sleeps untroubled
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and sleeps untroubled
while the blood dries on his hands
sleep of innocents
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Sleep of innocents
is past, murdered. Let us now
mingle with the night.
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Mingle with the night
give the moon your eyes and bones
sleep inside the stars.
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sleep inside the stars
the sleep of a billion years
burst brilliant awake
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burst brilliant awake
do not trickle joy this day
money a mickle
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money a mickle
mac's a muckle. Fie good sir!
That gent's of Gwent bent.

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That gent's of Gwent bent
thought to deed. Bonny ribbons
thread the Wicker Man.
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Thread the wicker man
dance from this world to beyond
weave spirit made flesh
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weave spirit made flesh
let air inflame. Ashen waves
ghost sleepy refrains.
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ghost sleepy refrains
a stilted apparition
largo of egret
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largo of egret
a slow flight over the lake
white dress billowing
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white dress billowing
she comes with a toothless grin
the rag and bone girl
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the rag and bone girl
sleeps on a couture of leaf
in a royal park
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In a royal park
proletariat banter
of ducks about swans
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Of ducks about swans
though heard, elegance persists,
ugliness ignored
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ugliness ignored
except by the gardener
who gave wild things space
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who gave wild things space
the bees like tiny flowers
not loud, not too bold
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Hi Phil, you must pronounce flowers as two syllables.
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I think flower is one of those words that can be either one or two syllables. There are some others too: hour, fire, world. And for Milton and other old poets even heaven could be a monosyllable.

Milton's in heaven
or in that other abode
which is also heav'n.
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not loud, not too bold
tentative songbird gathers
courage from crocus
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