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Mon Apr 03, 2006 12:23 pm

mine's a pint of Best
mines afull of coal and slag
beware of fire-damp!
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Mon Apr 03, 2006 12:33 pm

"Beware of Fire-damp!"
cried Thatcher to the miners
as she shafted them
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Mon Apr 03, 2006 12:39 pm

as she shafted them
she cut some big crude oil deals,
made it up in gas.
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Mon Apr 03, 2006 5:38 pm

Made it up in gas
Came down in a ball of fire
R101
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Mon Apr 03, 2006 5:46 pm

R101
multiplied by 1 + 1,
2(R101)
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Mon Apr 03, 2006 6:04 pm

2(R101)
a double room to which my
math skill should be sent
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Tue Apr 04, 2006 8:32 am

Maths skill should be sent
for a break in the Catskills
on the Graph Zeppelin
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Tue Apr 04, 2006 8:45 am

On the Graph Zeppelin
My God you should have seen us:
The figure head was....
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Tue Apr 04, 2006 11:14 am

the figure head was
an O instead, the page was
quality vellum.
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Quality Vellum
Entered the dining room of
The Bangkok Hilton.
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Tue Apr 04, 2006 2:51 pm

the Bangkok Hilton
distant cousin of New York
Paris Hilton's crap.
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Tue Apr 04, 2006 4:33 pm

Paris Hilton's crap
sticks in everyone's mind
like it's worth knowing.
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"Knowing" being key
Ask the video clerk for
"Booked Room with a View"
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 6:12 am

"Booked Room With a View"
was my request for a room
at the Bates Motel
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 8:29 am

at the Bates Motel
ripped shower curtains standard
big sharp knives extra.
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 10:08 am

Big Sharp Knives Extra!
Tony Blair shuts down Knife Shops
on the Ides of March
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 10:33 am

on the Ides of March
come to Bury St Edmonds
but not to praise him.
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 3:36 pm

but not to praise him
would seems a little churlish
Who said "Saints be praised?"
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 3:56 pm

Who said "saints be praised"
must think himself among them--
egotistic fuck.
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 4:09 pm

egotistic fuck
went right out and bought himself
a bigger mirror
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 4:12 pm

A bigger mirror,
with distended edges to
enhance smaller parts.
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a bigger mirror
lauds and magnifies his name
among other things
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Wed Apr 05, 2006 4:20 pm

Among other things
reckons he can play guitar.
He picks a good nose
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Thu Apr 06, 2006 11:10 am

He picks a good nose
From the surgeon's catalogue:
Blue, bulbous; with wart.
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Thu Apr 06, 2006 1:34 pm

He's good with a sword,
Roxanne doth turn up her nose
fickle, fickle gals...
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