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ton321
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Maybe my riches will come after my death,

the owned money of happiness, given and taken

like wages; the conspiratorial echoes of an earlier time

would alleviate the poverty of the promises that were broken.
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Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

Robert Graves
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Sun Aug 20, 2023 12:48 am

Nice last line and I like the half-rhyme. You have a typo in your title, i think!

Cheers,
John
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Sun Aug 20, 2023 12:51 am

Thanks John

cut/ paste doesn't always cut it

But we're never gonna survive, unless
We get a little crazy

Seal

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Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

Robert Graves
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Sun Aug 20, 2023 2:53 am

I believe I've heard that song. It's a good message. :)

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John
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