Poetry Forum

I held my grandmothers hand between mine,
loving its strangeness
and the paper thin skin stretched tight
over each bulging knuckle.


It was all contour, geography,
khyber pass and militant

the strange ways of athritis

that we traversed like mountain goats.

Excellent Tony.

Yup, lovely.

Cheers,
John

My only real suggestion is that you replace "between" with "in" in this line:

I held my grandmothers hand between mine,

Also, that you close up the vertical spaces to not more than one blank line each. In fact, I think the poem should be two stanzas of four lines each. If you do that, you might add some more punctuation to the second stanza.

Nice language. "Athritis" should be "arthritis".